Fixes and improvements

* Improved parts of the Susan/Astoria intro.
* Adjusted "Tonks poster" Acquisition for consistency.

* Minor writing fixes.

game/scripts/characters/susan/chitchat.rpy

@@ -36,7 +36,7 @@ label susan_chitchat:
         block:
             sus "Care for magical creatures is a bit scary sometimes..." ("soft", "happy", "base", "downR")
             sus "When we were taught how to properly approach Hippogriffs, I was shaking the entire time." ("open", "happy", "sad", "downR")
-            sus "After bowing and letting it approach me, I only pet it a couple of times. I wouldn't dare to ride the thing." ("normal", "happy", "sad", "mid")
+            sus "After bowing and letting it approach me, I only pet it a couple of times... I wouldn't dare to ride the thing." ("normal", "happy", "sad", "mid")
 
         block:
             sus "Sir, could you... Could you please tell professor Snape not to..." ("soft", "happy", "sad", "down")
@@ -56,7 +56,7 @@ label susan_chitchat:
 
         block:
             sus "Why does everyone assume I'm a Weasley, just because I've got red hair?" ("open", "base", "sad", "right")
-            sus "Some Slytherin boys keep mocking... even though I'm clearly wearing Hufflepuff robes." ("annoyed", "happy", "worried", "downR")
+            sus "The Slytherin boys keep mocking me... Even though I'm clearly wearing Hufflepuff robes." ("annoyed", "happy", "worried", "downR")
 
         block:
             sus "I used to be scared of ghosts before I got to Hogwarts, but the \"Fat Friar\" is so nice it's hard to stay scared of them." ("base", "base", "base", "mid")
@@ -73,7 +73,7 @@ label susan_chitchat:
 
         block:
             sus "How come Professor Snape is allowed to ask us to gather ingredients in the forbidden forest?" ("soft", "happy", "sad", "mid")
-            sus "The students that didn't go got a bad grade and the ones that did got detention..." ("angry", "closed", "sad", "mid")
+            sus "The students that didn't go got a bad grade, and the ones that did got detention..." ("angry", "closed", "sad", "mid")
             sus "How is that fair?" ("soft", "happy", "sad", "mid")
 
         block:

game/scripts/characters/susan/events/intro.rpy

@@ -67,7 +67,6 @@ label nt_he_susan_E1:
 label susan_intro_E1:
     stop music fadeout 1.0
     play sound "sounds/knocking.ogg"
-    call bld
     "*knock-knock-knock*"
     femv "*Uhm*... Professor Dumbledore, Sir?"
     femv "May I come in?"
@@ -83,18 +82,14 @@ label susan_intro_E1:
 
         "\"Who's there?\"":
             $ d_flag_01 = True # Knows name.
-            sus "Sus--{w=0.3} Susan Bones, Sir."
+            sus "Sus--{w=0.3} Susan Bones, sir."
             gen "Susan Bones who?" ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
             sus "... I'm sorry?"
             gen "*Ha-ha-ha-ha!*" ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-            show screen blktone
-            with d1
-            gen "I'm a terrible person..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-            hide screen blktone
-            with d1
+            gen "(I'm a terrible person...)" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
             sus "Professor?"
             gen "Yes, please come on in..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-            sus "Thank you, Sir."
+            sus "Thank you, sir."
 
         "\"Not now.\"":
             $ d_flag_02 = True # Susan walks in anyway.
@@ -102,7 +97,6 @@ label susan_intro_E1:
 
     call sus_walk(action="enter", xpos="desk", ypos="base")
 
-    call bld
     if d_flag_02:
         gen "Didn't I say not now--" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     else:
@@ -122,8 +116,7 @@ label susan_intro_E1:
     show screen animatedCG
     with fade
 
-    # Boing sound?
-    play sound "sounds/boing03.ogg"
+    play sound "sounds/boing03.ogg" #Big boobas
     with hpunch
     gen "(Damn! Look at them titties...)"
 

game/scripts/characters/tonks/events/hangout.rpy

@@ -316,7 +316,6 @@ label nt_he_story_intro_E2:
     ton "I'm talking about Alastor Moody, my mentor." ("open", "narrow", "annoyed", "mid")
     gen "Oh, of course." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     gen "(His parents must have hated him...)" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-    #gen "(What's wrong with a normal name... like Will Smith, or Robin Williams?)" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     gen "Anything you'd like to tell me about him?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     ton "Well, he's a bit of a weirdo, but he knows his stuff." ("open", "closed", "annoyed", "mid")
     ton "I guess if you're as paranoid as him, you'll end up knowing everything there is about the craft..." ("open", "base", "base", "R")
@@ -351,21 +350,10 @@ label nt_he_story_intro_E3:
     ton "No. Single as in... no one can do it." ("open", "narrow", "base", "mid")
     ton "It's almost impossible to summon drinks and food out of thin air." ("open", "base", "base", "R")
     ton "Best they can do is conjure water out of the surrounding humidity." ("upset", "base", "base", "R")
-    gen "If only I had my powers... I could do it with a snap of a finger." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+    gen "That's oddly limiting... Genie's can conjure food with a snap of a finger." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     ton "I'm sure you could..." ("silly", "happyCl", "base", "mid")
 
     nar "You brag about your almighty powers in front of the witch..."
-    nar "If only you hadn't lost them..."
-
-    #gen "(What kind of shit wizard can't even make food...)" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-    #gen "What about water though, doesn't that count as a drink?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-    #ton "..." ("base", "base", "base", "mid")
-    #ton "You know what, I never thought of that." ("base", "base", "base", "mid")
-    #gen "What even counts as food or drink... sound pretty arbitrary to me." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-    #ton "I don't think we're supposed to think about it too hard." ("base", "base", "base", "mid")
-    #gen "Less obvious plot-holes that way I suppose..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-    #ton "Less what, sorry?" ("base", "base", "base", "mid")
-    #gen "No matter, just thinking out loud is all." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
 
     jump end_tonks_hangout
 
@@ -577,13 +565,12 @@ label nt_he_story_E11:
     gen "Why Snape?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     ton "Well, he was the most likely not to be in the staff room. Which is where I wanted to get in." ("grin", "narrow", "base", "R")
     gen "Why's that?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-    ton "He never leaves the dungeons does he?" ("open", "wide", "raised", "mid") #pretty sure in the books they always refer to it as multiple dungeons but could be wrong
+    ton "He never leaves the dungeons does he?" ("open", "wide", "raised", "mid")
     ton "Just take one look at his pasty face and you'll see..." ("mad", "base", "base", "downR")
     ton "Don't tell him I said that..." ("clench", "base", "base", "mid")
-    gen "..." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") #[Smirk]
+    gen "..." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     ton "So... I changed into professor Snape and went towards the staff room..." ("base", "base", "annoyed", "R")
     gen "Isn't the staff room just full of boring old teachers?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-    #ton "Have you used a mirror lately?" ("open", "base", "raised", "mid")
     ton "My goal wasn't to talk with the teachers..." ("open", "closed", "base", "mid")
     ton "I was trying to get a key to the prefects' bathroom." ("base", "base", "angry", "mid")
     gen "And you couldn't just turn into a prefect, and get in there that way?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")

game/scripts/interface/letter.rpy

@@ -144,17 +144,15 @@ default letter_nt_1 = Letter(
 
 label letter_nt_1:
     gen "Well now I'm curious..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-    nar "You slowly roll out the piece of parchment."
+    play sound "sounds/paper_rustle.ogg"
+    nar "You slowly roll out the piece of parchment - getting a good look of it."
     pause.2
     call kiss_her
     pause.5
 
-    gen "Cute..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-    play sound "sounds/scroll.ogg"
-    nar "You roll out the poster completely - getting a good look of it."
     gen "Nice!" ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
 
-    call give_reward(text="{heart} {heart} {heart}", gift="interface/icons/tonks_poster.webp", sound=True)
+    call give_reward(text="A new room decoration have been unlocked!", gift="interface/icons/tonks_poster.webp", sound=True)
     $ tonks_poster_ITEM.owned = 1
 
     gen "I'll definitely hang this one up!" ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")