From 5dba635a27aaafddd2ed02fdb551ba578f76b740 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Johnny28 Date: Fri, 2 Dec 2022 19:35:20 +0100 Subject: [PATCH] Minor writing fixes * Minor writing fixes - Luna "inspect body" favours. --- .../luna/events/favors/inspect_her_body.rpy | 168 +++++++++--------- 1 file changed, 85 insertions(+), 83 deletions(-) diff --git a/game/scripts/characters/luna/events/favors/inspect_her_body.rpy b/game/scripts/characters/luna/events/favors/inspect_her_body.rpy index c00256b1..c2c9ed2e 100644 --- a/game/scripts/characters/luna/events/favors/inspect_her_body.rpy +++ b/game/scripts/characters/luna/events/favors/inspect_her_body.rpy @@ -42,7 +42,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect: label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E1_intro: gen "Ready for your physical, [luna_name]?" ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - lun "My Physical, [lun_genie_name]?" ("open", "base", "raised", "mid") + lun "My physical, [lun_genie_name]?" ("open", "base", "raised", "mid") gen "Your inspection!" ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Oooh...{w=0.3} The inspection!" ("grin", "base", "base", "mid") lun "Yes, I'm ready!" ("base", "base", "base", "mid") @@ -86,16 +86,16 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E1_intro: else: gen "Let's see what we got here..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") gen "*Hmm*..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - lun "Something wrong [lun_genie_name]?" ("soft", "base", "raised", "mid") + lun "Something wrong, [lun_genie_name]?" ("soft", "base", "raised", "mid") gen "Not at all, [luna_name]!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") gen "I'm just inspecting those lovely breasts of yours!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "*Ehm*...{w=0.3} Lovely, [lun_genie_name]?" ("soft", "base", "raised", "mid") gen "*Err*...{w=0.4} Healthy! They look very healthy!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "I see...{w=0.4} Thank you [lun_genie_name]!" ("grin", "base", "base", "mid") - gen "But I still need a proper look so you're going to have to take your bra off as well." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "But I still need a proper look, so you're going to have to take your bra off as well." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Certainly [lun_genie_name]." ("base", "base", "base", "mid") - #Luna takes bra off (Not available in wardrobe until next tier) + #Luna takes bra off (Not possible in wardrobe until next tier) $ renpy.sound.play("sounds/cloth_sound3.ogg") $ luna.strip("bra") with d3 @@ -108,7 +108,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E1_intro: lun "So...{w=0.4} Do you think this should work, [lun_genie_name]?" ("open", "base", "raised", "mid") gen "Oh...{w=0.4} It's working alright." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - call nar(">Focusing your attention on the girls breasts you feel your cock harden more and more with each stroke...") + call nar(">Focusing your attention on the girls breasts, you feel your cock harden more and more with each stroke...") lun "Great! So what do I have to do to get the Wrackspurts out of them?" ("smile", "base", "base", "mid") gen "*Mmm*...{w=0.4} The what, sorry?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") @@ -144,20 +144,20 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E1_intro: gen "I see..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") gen "Well that wont do." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") gen "Fighting it is what's been holding you...{w=0.4} *Err*...{w=0.4} Them back, [luna_name]." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - gen "You need to allow that feeling to build up or you--{w=0.2} *Ah*...{w=0.4} You won't be able to expel them." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "You need to allow that feeling to build up, or you--{w=0.2} *Ah*...{w=0.4} You won't be able to expel them." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") call nar(">You keep stroking your cock, thinking about what you'd do to those nipples...") lun "Wait...{w=0.4} So I've been doing it wrong the whole time!?" ("angry", "base", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") - gen "Yes...{w=0.4} *Nghh*...{w=0.4} It appears what you've been feeling is the Spurts trying to get out you see..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "Yes...{w=0.4} *Nghh*...{w=0.4} It appears what you've been feeling is the Spurts trying to get out, you see..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Ooooh..." ("open", "base", "base", "stare") lun "That makes so much sense!" ("grin", "wide", "base", "mid") lun "I can't believe I didn't think of that before!" ("angry", "base", "base", "down", cheeks="blush") - call nar(">Looking up at Luna's face, you notice her expression changed to that of excitement and lust...") - call nar(">After a moment of silence you finally speak up in fear of not being able to finish in time.") + call nar(">Looking up at Luna's face, you notice her expression has changed to that of excitement and lust...") + call nar(">After a moment of silence, you finally speak up in fear of not being able to finish in time.") - gen "*Ehm*...{w=0.4} So...{w=0.4} Any other areas that you've noticed being unusually sensitive [luna_name]?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "*Ehm*...{w=0.4} So...{w=0.4} Any other areas that you've noticed being unusually sensitive, [luna_name]?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Oh, yes [lun_genie_name]!" ("mad", "base", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") lun "There's this area down here!" ("angry", "base", "base", "down", cheeks="blush") @@ -191,13 +191,13 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E1_intro: lun "[lun_genie_name]?" gen "*Ahem*...{w=0.4} Yes, I'd say that area is definitely a contender." - call nar(">With a full view of the girls naked body, you feel your cock throbbing in your hand and you begin stroking it even faster...") + call nar(">With a full view of the girl's naked body, you feel your cock throbbing in your hand, and you begin stroking it even faster...") lun "I thought it might be...{w=0.4} It does get just as sensitive as my breasts...{w=0.4} Maybe more even!" call nar("*Fap* *Fap* *Fap*...") - gen "*Ah*, Yes...{w=0.4} both those areas appear to be very susceptible...{w=0.4} To spurts." + gen "*Ah*, Yes...{w=0.4} both of those areas do appear to be very susceptible...{w=0.4} To spurts." lun "I knew it!" @@ -207,7 +207,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E1_intro: with fade lun "" ("grin", "base", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush", flip=False, trans=dissolve) - call nar(">Luna turns back around and as you get a full view of her front, you feel yourself getting close to the edge.") + call nar(">Luna turns back around, and as you get a full view of her front, you feel yourself getting close to the edge.") lun "So that's how you came up with the idea of rubbing your penis, [lun_genie_name]!" ("grin", "wink", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") lun "To bait the Wrackspurts to one spot!" ("crooked_smile", "base", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") @@ -215,7 +215,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E1_intro: call nar("*Fap* *Fap* *Fap*...") - lun "So when you do it, they all start gathering in there until there's nowhere else for them to go and finally..." ("smile", "narrow", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") + lun "So when you do it, they all start gathering in there until there's nowhere else for them to go, and finally..." ("smile", "narrow", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") lun "You expel them right out!" ("grin", "base", "annoyed", "mid", cheeks="blush") gen "*Ah*...{w=0.4} Yes...{w=0.4} That's it girl, you've cracked it!" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "That's geni--" ("crooked_smile", "base", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") @@ -280,7 +280,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E1_intro: lun "I know!" ("smile", "wide", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") lun "[lun_genie_name]...{w=0.2} Why don't you teach me?" ("smile", "base", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") gen "..." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - gen "Oh, well I don't know [luna_name]..." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "Oh, well I don't know, [luna_name]..." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "[lun_genie_name], please!" ("mad", "narrow", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") hide luna_main with d3 @@ -291,7 +291,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E1_intro: with flash gen "*Ghk*... How did you--" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - lun "[lun_genie_name], if I can't do it myself then you'll {size=+5}have{/size} to teach me!" ("clench", "wide", "base", "stare", cheeks="blush", xpos="mid", ypos="base", flip=True, trans=dissolve) + lun "[lun_genie_name], if I can't do it myself, then you'll {size=+5}have{/size} to teach me!" ("clench", "wide", "base", "stare", cheeks="blush", xpos="mid", ypos="base", flip=True, trans=dissolve) gen "Teach you how to masturbate..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") call nar(">Luna stares into your eyes as she unconsciously begins grinding her pussy on the edge of your desk.") @@ -316,7 +316,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E1_intro: lun "Alright then!" ("soft", "base", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") gen "I haven't even told you what it is yet." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Don't worry [lun_genie_name], I trust you!" ("grin", "narrow", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") - gen "If we're to be able to have you expel these spurts successfully then you're going to have to venture into a completely new venue of magic..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "If we're to be able to have you expel these spurts successfully, then you're going to have to venture into a completely new venue of magic..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "New venue of magic..." ("angry", "base", "raised", "mid", cheeks="blush") lun "I'm not sure I understand, [lun_genie_name]." ("soft", "narrow", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") gen "As you know... These techniques are untested and go beyond normal boundaries of magical conventions." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") @@ -349,10 +349,10 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E1_intro: gen "Just make sure not to touch yourself." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") gen "That will have to wait until I can assist you." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Alright... I'll try..." ("mad", "narrow", "base", "downL") - gen "Trying won't be enough [luna_name]..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "Trying won't be enough, [luna_name]..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") gen "Don't...{w=0.4} Touch...{w=0.4} Yourself..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Okay, I won't!" ("angry", "base", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") - gen "Good...{w=0.3} Then I believe we're done here for now..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "Good...{w=0.3} Then I believe we're done here... For now at least." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Oh...{w=0.2} Of course." ("soft", "base", "base", "downL", cheeks="blush") show screen blkfade @@ -379,7 +379,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E1_intro: gen "Now, you better head off to bed." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Okay." ("open", "base", "base", "mid") lun "Good night, [lun_genie_name]!" ("base", "base", "base", "mid") - gen "Good night [luna_name]." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "Good night, [luna_name]." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") call lun_walk(action="leave") @@ -409,7 +409,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E2_intro: pause .5 gen "Whoa!" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - #Luna takes off Bra (Not available in wardrobe until next tier) + #Luna takes off Bra (Not possible in wardrobe until next tier) $ renpy.sound.play("sounds/cloth_sound3.ogg") $ luna.strip("bra") with d3 @@ -428,7 +428,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E2_intro: gen "*Hmm*... Those panties though...{w=0.4} I'd love to smell them..." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - #Luna takes of Panties and everything else (Panty strip is not available in wardrobe until next tier) + #Luna takes of Panties and everything else (Panty strip is not possible in wardrobe until next tier) $ renpy.sound.play("sounds/cloth_sound3.ogg") $ luna.strip("all") with d3 @@ -439,13 +439,13 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E2_intro: gen "I mean I can't wait to--" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Please [lun_genie_name], they've been bothering me constantly..." ("angry", "narrow", "worried", "mid", cheeks="blush") gen "(Oh good, she wasn't listening...)" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - gen "Well, I hope you've followed my instructions and that you haven't touched yourself..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - lun "I... I haven't, [lun_genie_name]!" ("soft", "happyCl", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") + gen "Well, I hope you've followed my instructions, and that you haven't touched yourself..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + lun "I...{w=0.4} I haven't, [lun_genie_name]!" ("soft", "happyCl", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") call nar(">Luna grinds her legs together once more, and you notice a wet streak beginning to run down her leg.") gen "Good girl..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - gen "Then come up to me so we can deal with those spurts once and for all." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "Then come up to me so we can deal with those spurts, once and for all." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Thank you [lun_genie_name]..." ("angry", "narrow", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") #Luna quickly walks up towards desk, fades to black @@ -453,7 +453,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E2_intro: show screen blkfade with d5 - call nar(">Luna rushes up to your desk and without any further instructions, plants her cheeks firmly in your lap, waiting for your next move expectantly.") + call nar(">Luna rushes up to your desk, and without any further instructions, plants her cheeks firmly in your lap, waiting for your next move expectantly.") #Fades back to Luna in your lap call lun_chibi_scene("inspect_idle_naked") @@ -461,7 +461,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E2_intro: with d5 call nar(">Before moving on, you can't help but pick up the sounds of her shallow breaths and the unusual warmth, despite her current state of undress coming off her body.") - call nar(">You feel your cock harden slightly beneath your robes, almost at the verge of pressing up in between the girls cheeks.") + call nar(">You feel your cock harden slightly beneath your robes, almost at the verge of pressing up in between the girl's cheeks.") gen "*Ahem*...{w=0.4} So...{w} The sensitive areas we discussed previously." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "*Mmm*..." ("soft", "closed", "low", "mid", cheeks="blush", xpos="mid", ypos="base", flip=True, trans=dissolve) gen "[luna_name]?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") @@ -512,11 +512,11 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E2_intro: lun "*Ah*...{w=0.4} Yes, it definitely feels a lot more intense than...{w=0.4} *Mmm*..." ("open", "closed", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") lun "But I'm not feeling that--{w=0.2} *Ah*...{w=0.4} Relief you mentioned..." ("mad", "closed", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") - lun "My body still feels as if-- *Ah*...{w=0.4} As if on fire, [lun_genie_name]..." ("angry", "happyCl", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") + lun "My body still feels as if--{w=0.2} *Ah*...{w=0.4} As if on fire, [lun_genie_name]..." ("angry", "happyCl", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") call nar(">As Luna pleads to you, she starts rubbing her pussy against your legs... The tip of your cock sliding between her ass-cheeks each time.") - gen "(If she keeps this up then this bitch in heat will make me bust before she does...)" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "(If she keeps this up, then this bitch in heat will make me bust before she does...)" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "It think something is happening...{w=0.4} I feel woozy, [lun_genie_name]..." ("angry", "happyCl", "low", "mid", cheeks="blush") call lun_chibi_scene("inspect_lean_grope_breasts_naked") @@ -543,7 +543,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E2_intro: gen "*Ah*!!!" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") call cum_block - call nar(">And with a soft groan you let out a final spurt, emptying your entire sack on the girl...") + call nar(">And with a soft groan, you let out a final spurt, emptying your entire sack on the girl...") call nar(">Your semen which reached all the way up onto her hair slowly begins sliding down her back.") gen "*Ah*...{w=0.4} *Ah*...{w=0.4} *Ah*..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") @@ -558,7 +558,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E2_intro: show screen blkfade with d5 - call nar(">Luna now shaking slightly, stands up and makes her way to the front of your desk, leaving a noticeable wet streak across your robes.") + call nar(">Luna, now shaking slightly, stands up and makes her way to the front of your desk, leaving a noticeable wet streak across your robes.") call nar(">She begins dressing herself, keeping her eyes on the floor the entire time.") $ luna.wear("all") hide luna_main @@ -597,19 +597,19 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E2_intro: lun "" ("base", "narrow", "worried", "down") #Looks down smile call nar(">Luna gives off a hopeful smile whilst still staring at her feet.") - call nar(">After a couple of seconds she looks back up at you with a confused expression across her face.") + call nar(">After a couple of seconds, she looks back up at you with a confused expression across her face.") lun "[lun_genie_name]...{w=0.3} What was that cold feeling going down my spine?" ("upset", "narrow", "base", "mid") gen "Oh...{w=0.3} That." ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") gen "*Err*...{w=0.3} I wouldn't worry about that [luna_name], it happens sometimes... Your body can do all sorts of things when you're moments away from spurting." ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "So we actually almost did it, [lun_genie_name]?" ("clench", "narrow", "base", "mid") gen "We almost did \"it\" alright..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - lun "Aww...{w=0.3} Blithering Humdinger..." ("upset", "narrow", "annoyed", "downL") + lun "*Aww*...{w=0.3} Blithering Humdinger..." ("upset", "narrow", "annoyed", "downL") gen "I'll give you some more pointers next time...{w=0.3} I'm sure we'll get there." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Okay...{w=0.3} Thank you [lun_genie_name]!" ("base", "narrow", "base", "mid") #looks at you smiling if game.daytime: - lun "If I may then I'll head back to class for today, [lun_genie_name]." ("soft", "base", "base", "R") + lun "If I may, then I'll head back to class for today, [lun_genie_name]." ("soft", "base", "base", "R") gen "Certainly, [luna_name]." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") else: gen "Now you best be off to bed." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") @@ -694,7 +694,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E3_intro: lun "But that's not working [lun_genie_name]...{w=0.3} It's not my brain they're making all fuzzy..." ("clench", "narrow", "base", "mid") gen "Then tell me...{w=0.3} What else have we learned about them so far?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "*Uhm*..." ("upset", "base", "base", "downR") - lun "We learned that you can bait them to a particularly sensitive area by thinking positive thoughts and rubbing it before finally expelling them..." ("angry", "narrow", "base", "down") + lun "We learned that you can bait them to a particularly sensitive area by thinking positive thoughts, and rubbing it, before finally expelling them..." ("angry", "narrow", "base", "down") lun "But we tried that [lun_genie_name], and it didn't work!" ("annoyed", "narrow", "base", "R") gen "I managed to do it...{w=0.3} So I must've done something different..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "*Hmm*..." ("upset", "narrow", "base", "downL") @@ -703,7 +703,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E3_intro: lun "I was thinking too much about the Wrackspurts and how glad I'd be to finally get rid of them." ("mad", "wide", "base", "mid") lun "What I should have done is project positive thoughts onto the area itself!" ("smile", "narrow", "base", "down") gen "Exactly!" ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - gen "Ignore every intrusive thought that may pop into your mind and just keep focusing on your body and how it feels..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "Ignore every intrusive thought that may pop into your mind, and just keep focusing on your body and how it feels..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") gen "Let the sensations engulf you completely until your mind is clear..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") gen "The rest should happen by itself..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Yes [lun_genie_name]..." ("crooked_smile", "narrow", "base", "mid") @@ -770,7 +770,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E3_intro: call lun_chibi_scene("inspect_grope_breasts_naked") call nar(">Without hesitation, you reach forward and grab Luna's breasts.") - call nar(">As you begin silently kneading them, any doubts in Luna's mind appears to slowly wash away as she lets the sensations of your touch overtake any previous feelings of doubt.") + call nar(">As you begin silently kneading them, any doubts in Luna's mind appears to slowly wash away, and she lets the sensations of your touch overtake any previous feelings of doubt.") lun "*Ah*...{w=0.4} [lun_genie_name]..." ("soft", "closed", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") @@ -790,18 +790,20 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E3_intro: gen "(Nnnn-{w=0.2} Not today!)" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "" ("normal", "closed", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") - call nar(">Determined to keep your composure this time you move your gaze down too see Luna rubbing her thighs together.") + call nar(">Determined to keep your composure this time, you move your gaze down to see Luna rubbing her thighs together.") gen "(Well then...{w=0.4} Looks like she's ready.)" ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") call lun_chibi_scene("inspect_lean_idle_naked") lun "" ("soft", "narrow", "base", "R", cheeks="blush") - call nar(">As you remove your hands from Luna's breasts she opens her eyes, confused as to why you stopped. Without saying anything, you place your hand across her pussy and give it a gentle rub.") + call nar(">As you remove your hands from Luna's breasts, she opens her eyes, confused as to why you stopped.") + call nar(">Without saying anything, you place your hand across her pussy, and give it a gentle rub.") lun "Ooooh!" ("crooked_smile", "wide", "base", "stare", cheeks="blush") call lun_chibi_scene("inspect_lean_grope_vagina_naked") - call nar(">A shudder passes through Luna's body from your initial touch. You begin moving your forefinger up and down her slit with increasing ease as her pussy becomes wetter and wetter.") + call nar(">A shudder passes through Luna's body from your initial touch.") + call nar(">You then begin moving your forefinger up and down her slit with increasing ease, as her pussy becomes wetter and wetter.") lun "*Ah*...{w=0.4} [lun_genie_name]...{w=0.4}This feels a lot different to you--{w=0.2} *Ah*...{w=0.4} Touching my breasts..." ("open", "wink", "base", "R", cheeks="blush") gen "(You ain't seen nothing yet...)" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") @@ -838,7 +840,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E3_intro: gen "(*Hmm*...{w=0.4} Perhaps I shouldn't go so hard on her...)" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") stop bg_sounds fadeout 2 - call nar(">You stop your movement for a second to give Luna some breathing room but as you do she starts moving her hips back and forth on her own.") + call nar(">You stop your movement for a second to give Luna some breathing room, but as you do, she starts moving her hips back and forth on her own.") gen "(Never mind then...)" ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") gen "*Tsk*... Such impatience with the youths these days..." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") @@ -862,15 +864,15 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E3_intro: lun "[lun_genie_name]...{w=0.3} This... {w=0.3} is...{w=0.3} amazing...{w=0.3} I... {w=0.3} never...{w=0.3} thought--" ("soft", "happyCl", "base", "stare", cheeks="blush") gen "Then don't...{w=0.3} Focus on the feeling!" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "*Ah*...{w=0.3} Yes...{w=0.3} [lun_genie_name]." ("soft", "closed", "base", "stare", cheeks="blush") - lun "*N-n-ngh!!!*" ("grin", "closed", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") + lun "*N-n-ngh*!!!" ("grin", "closed", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") - call nar(">Not showing her any mercy you continue pumping your fingers in and out of her rapidly.") + call nar(">Not showing her any mercy, you continue pumping your fingers in and out of her rapidly.") lun "*Ah*...{w=0.5} [lun_genie_name]...{w=0.4} I think this is it!" ("mad", "narrow", "base", "stare", cheeks="blush") lun "I'm...{w=0.3} *Ah*...{w=0.3} I'm--" ("open_tongue", "narrow", "base", "up", cheeks="blush") gen "Yes girl, let all of it out!" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - call nar(">You insert your fingers one last time as Luna's body finally gives in, her entire weight dropping onto your hand as your fingers penetrates her down to the base.") + call nar(">You insert your fingers one last time... As Luna's body finally gives in, her entire weight drops onto your hand and your fingers penetrates her down to the base.") lun "I'm cumming!!" ("mad", "base", "base", "ahegao", cheeks="blush") lun "*Nngh*...{w=0.8}{nw}" ("clench", "base", "base", "ahegao", cheeks="blush") @@ -900,8 +902,8 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E3_intro: show screen blkfade with d5 - call nar(">Luna slumps forward onto your desk. Her grip around your fingers loosening enough for you to free yourself.") - call nar(">You swiftly pull them out of her which causes her to shudder once more before going completely limp on your desk.") + call nar(">Luna goes to stand up, but as she does, her legs give way and she slumps forward, completely limp onto your desk.") + call nar(">Luckily her grip around your fingers finally loosens enough for you to free yourself, and you swiftly pull them out, which causes her to shudder once more.") $ renpy.sound.play("sounds/slick_02.ogg") lun "*Ah*..." @@ -923,12 +925,12 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E3_intro: lun "Did you see how many Wrackspurts I expelled?" ("crooked_smile", "base", "raised", "mid") gen "Very impressive indeed." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "I can't believe we finally did it!" ("crooked_smile", "happyCl", "base", "mid") - lun "Finally a fool proof way of expelling wrackspurts from other areas than your brain!" ("crooked_smile", "narrow", "base", "mid") + lun "Finally, a fool proof way of expelling wrackspurts from other areas than your brain!" ("crooked_smile", "narrow", "base", "mid") gen "Quite the discovery! I'm sure we'll be able to help a lot of backed up people." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Yes!" ("grin", "base", "base", "mid") - lun "So, what next? We've solved it now right?" ("grin", "base", "raised", "mid") + lun "So, what next? We've solved it now, right?" ("grin", "base", "raised", "mid") gen "Solved--" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - gen "Now I think you're getting a bit ahead of yourself Miss Lovegood." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "Now I think you're getting a bit ahead of yourself [luna_name]." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "But--" ("angry", "base", "base", "mid") gen "Masturbation is only a temporary solution, so perfecting it is vital... Until I've come up with a more permanent solution that is..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Then I'll practice as soon as I get to my dorm!" ("smile", "narrow", "base", "mid") @@ -944,7 +946,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E3_intro: gen "Off you go." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Yes [lun_genie_name], thank you [lun_genie_name]..." ("base", "wink", "base", "mid") else: - gen "Well then, it's getting late so you best head to your dorm Miss Lovegood." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "Well then, it's getting late so you best head to your dorm [luna_name]." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") gen "Off you go." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Yes [lun_genie_name]." ("base", "base", "base", "mid") lun "Good night, [lun_genie_name]." ("base", "wink", "base", "mid") @@ -971,12 +973,12 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E3_intro: label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E4_repeat: gen "How are you feeling, [luna_name]?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - gen "Have those spratters been bothering you any more?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - lun "A little bit better, [lun_genie_name]." ("soft", "narrow", "low", "down") - lun "Once I had gotten back to my dorm I got to thinking about our last session and some of them seemed to return though." ("upset", "narrow", "base", "downL") + gen "Have those spratters been bothering you any further?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + lun "I'm feeling a little bit better, [lun_genie_name]." ("soft", "narrow", "low", "down") + lun "Although I began feeling them move around again once I was on the way to my dorm, just thinking about our last session." ("upset", "narrow", "base", "downL") gen "Well, that's to be expected." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - gen "Until we've found a fool proof way to deal with them I'm afraid this will have make do as a regular treatment." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "Until we've found a fool proof way to deal with them, I'm afraid this will have make do as a regular treatment." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Alright..." ("soft", "narrow", "base", "downL") lun "I suppose that's not too bad." ("base", "narrow", "base", "down") gen "Good to hear..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") @@ -1016,7 +1018,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E4_repeat: call nar(">You begin moving your hands in a circular motion, squeezing her breasts together and pulling them apart over and over...") lun "*Mmm*..." ("soft", "closed", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") - call nar(">Luna whose thoughts are now enveloped by the sensations of your touch pushes her crotch towards you once again as if desperate to feel you inside of her...") + call nar(">Luna, whose thoughts are now enveloped by the sensations of your touch, pushes her crotch towards you once again, as if desperate to feel you inside of her...") call lun_chibi_scene("inspect_lean_idle_naked") with d3 @@ -1051,9 +1053,9 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E4_repeat: lun "*Ah*!!!" ("clench", "base", "base", "stare", cheeks="blush") call nar(">Taken by surprise, Luna clenches her thighs, which only strengthens her grip around your fingers...") lun "*Ah*... [lun_genie_name]!" ("angry", "narrow", "base", "R", cheeks="blush") - gen "That's it [luna_name]...{w=0.4} Keep that grip steady and this will be over before you know it..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "That's it [luna_name]...{w=0.4} Keep that grip steady, and this will be over before you know it..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "*Ah*...{w=0.3} *Ah*...{w=0.3} But [lun_genie_name]--" ("open", "happyCl", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") - call nar(">As you keep pumping your fingers repeatedly inside of Luna you feel her grip loosen slightly...") + call nar(">As you keep pumping your fingers repeatedly inside of Luna, you feel her grip loosen slightly...") lun "I...{w=0.4} I..." ("upset", "happyCl", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") lun "{size=+5}I don't want it to be over!{/size}" ("scream", "narrow", "worried", "stare", cheeks="blush") gen "Too bad!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") @@ -1066,11 +1068,11 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E4_repeat: play bg_sounds "sounds/slickloopveryfast.ogg" - call nar(">Luna trying to keep that sensation going, tries to get a hold of herself as not to let herself cum.") + call nar(">Luna, trying to keep that sensation going, tries to get a hold of herself as not to let herself cum.") lun "*Ah*...{w=0.2} *Ah*...{w=0.2} *Ah*..." ("open", "happyCl", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") - call nar(">Taking it as a challenge you insert your middle finger all the way in which proves to be enough for the girl.") + call nar(">Taking it as a challenge you insert your fingers all the way in, which proves to be enough for the girl.") call lun_chibi_scene("inspect_lean_idle_naked") lun "*Ah*...{w=0.2} No...{w=0.3} I'm cumming!!" ("clench", "happyCl", "worried", "mid", cheeks="blush") @@ -1079,7 +1081,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E4_repeat: $ renpy.sound.play("sounds/slick_01.ogg") lun "*AAAAAH*!!!" ("clench", "narrow", "base", "up", cheeks="blush") - call nar(">Luna's thighs clenches around you as waves of pleasure hits her.") + call nar(">Luna's thighs clenches around you, as waves of pleasure washes over her.") lun "*Ah*...{w=0.2} I'm...{w=0.2} I'm--" ("mad", "narrow", "base", "stare", cheeks="blush") @@ -1109,7 +1111,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E4_repeat: with d5 gen "Well done, [luna_name]!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - gen "Looks like you managed to get even more out than last time!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "Looks like you managed to spurt even more than last time!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "*Mmm*...{w=0.4} Thank you, [lun_genie_name]." ("base", "closed", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") gen "Holding them in for as long as possible was very clever!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Oh-- I...{w=0.3} Yes, thank you!" ("soft", "narrow", "base", "downR", cheeks="blush") @@ -1158,17 +1160,17 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T3_E1_repeat: gen "That's not the...{w} Well I suppose..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "I hope I'm not too much of a bother, [lun_genie_name]..." ("soft", "narrow", "worried", "downL") lun "I know your time is valuable." ("open", "narrow", "base", "downL") - gen "Assisting my students is part of my job [luna_name]." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "Assisting my students is part of my job, [luna_name]." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") if game.daytime: - gen "Even if that meant treating you for an entire day then so be it..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "Even if that meant treating you for an entire day, then so be it..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") else: - gen "Even if that meant treating you all night then so be it..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "Even if that meant treating you all night, then so be it..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Really? You'd do that?" ("clench", "base", "base", "mid") gen "If that's what is required of me..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "*Hmm*..." ("annoyed", "narrow", "base", "downL") - gen "(She's really considering it?)" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "(Is she really considering it?)" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "I wouldn't want you to feel obligated just because it's part of your job..." ("open", "narrow", "base", "mid") lun "I think I will still be fine with the amount of time we're spending on the treatment for now." ("base", "narrow", "base", "down") gen "Good to hear." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") @@ -1176,33 +1178,33 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T3_E1_repeat: gen "So, are you ready to begin your treatment?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Yes... Please go ahead [lun_genie_name]..." ("base", "base", "base", "mid") - gen "Then just relax and let me take care of it." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") + gen "Then just relax, and let me take care of it." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") call lun_chibi_scene("inspect_grope_breasts_naked") - call nar(">Grabbing on to Luna's breasts, you begin massaging them gently.") + call nar(">Grabbing onto Luna's breasts, you begin massaging them gently.") lun "*Ah*..." ("open", "closed", "base", "mid") - call nar(">Luna immediately shudders and lets out a soft moan as a response to your touch.") + call nar(">Luna immediately shudders, and lets out a soft moan as a response to your touch.") gen "(All day... Such a silly girl, I doubt she'd last an hour...)" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") call nar(">You let go of Luna's breasts and give her nipples a quick pinch.") lun "Ouch!" ("mad", "wide", "base", "up") gen "Whops." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") menu: "-Pinch her again-": - call nar(">You quickly pinch Luna's nipples again and she jumps slightly by surprise.") + call nar(">You quickly pinch Luna's nipples again, and she jumps slightly by surprise.") lun "Ow, Ow, Ow!!" ("clench", "happyCl", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") lun "[lun_genie_name]!" ("mad", "narrow", "worried", "R", cheeks="blush") gen "Just give it a moment... It will feel better soon..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Are you--" ("angry", "closed", "base", "down", cheeks="blush") - call nar(">You pinch her again, even harder this time and Luna suddenly jerks her body forward.") + call nar(">You pinch her again, even harder this time, and Luna suddenly jerks her body forward.") call lun_chibi_scene("inspect_lean_idle_naked") lun "Stop it [lun_genie_name]...{w=0.4} I can't..." ("mad", "happyCl", "worried", "mid", cheeks="blush") - call nar(">As you let go of her tits Luna's words trail off slightly...") + call nar(">As you let go of her tits, Luna's words trail off slightly...") gen "Can't what, [luna_name]?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "That's odd..." ("mad", "narrow", "base", "down", cheeks="blush") - lun "It feels kind of nice after you let go of them." ("soft", "narrow", "base", "down", cheeks="blush") + lun "It feels kind of nice, after you let go of them." ("soft", "narrow", "base", "down", cheeks="blush") gen "More sensitive?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "Yes..." ("soft", "narrow", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") lun "Do it again [lun_genie_name]!" ("angry", "base", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") @@ -1211,18 +1213,18 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T3_E1_repeat: gen "If you say so..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") call lun_chibi_scene("inspect_lean_grope_breasts_naked") - call nar(">You pinch Luna's nipples again and being ready for it this time you only hear a short intake of breath.") + call nar(">You pinch Luna's nipples again, and being fully ready for it this time, you only hear a short intake of breath.") lun "" ("soft", "base", "base", "up", cheeks="blush") - call nar(">Releasing your grip of her nipples you begin brushing your fingertips along the sides of her breasts, sliding your fingers along the sides of her nipples as you do so.") + call nar(">Releasing your grip of her nipples, you begin brushing your fingertips along the sides of her breasts, up and around her nipples.") lun "*Ah*...{w=0.4} How...{w=0.4} How strange..." ("open", "closed", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") - call nar(">Luna now enjoying the heightened sensitivity of her nipples begins to relax, her breathing slowing down more and more.") + call nar(">Luna, now enjoying the heightened sensitivity of her nipples, begins to relax, her breathing slowing down more and more.") lun "..." ("base", "closed", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") gen "(Am I just giving her a massage now?)" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") "-Don't-": lun "Please be careful [lun_genie_name]..." ("angry", "narrow", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") - call nar(">Trying not to give into the temptation you resume massaging Luna's breasts.") - call nar(">Luna's breathing slows down as she begins feeling more relaxed.") + call nar(">Trying not to give into the temptation, you resume massaging Luna's breasts.") + call nar(">Her breathing soon begins slowing down and you feel her previously tense grip around your legs starting to relaxe.") lun "..." ("base", "closed", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") @@ -1230,7 +1232,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T3_E1_repeat: gen "(Am I just giving her a massage now?)" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "*Ah*....." ("base", "closed", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") - call nar(">As you continue massaging her, she bends forward to lean on your desk.") + call nar(">You suddenly feel her beginning to go limp in your hands, and realise that your grip is the only thing preventing her from slumping forward.") call lun_chibi_scene("inspect_lean_grope_breasts_naked") with d3 @@ -1241,7 +1243,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T3_E1_repeat: gen "[luna_name]?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") call lun_chibi_scene("inspect_lean_idle_naked") - call nar(">You let go of Luna's breasts and she opens her eyes in confusion.") + call nar(">You let go of Luna's breasts, and she goes stiff, opening her eyes in confusion.") lun "*Huh*?" ("soft", "narrow", "base", "stare", cheeks="blush") gen "I believe our purpose here isn't for me to massage you until you fall asleep..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") @@ -1251,7 +1253,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T3_E1_repeat: call nar(">You stick your hand down between Luna's legs and begin rubbing your fingers along her slit.") lun "*Ah*..." ("soft", "closed", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush") - call nar(">As you brush up against her you notice how wet she is already.") + call nar(">As you brush up against her, you notice how wet she is already.") gen "*Hmm*... Looks like that massage helped after all..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "*Ah*...{w=0.4} *Ah*...{w=0.4} *Ah*..." ("open", "closed", "low", "mid", cheeks="blush") call nar(">Moving your forefinger up and down against Luna, you hear her breathing becoming more and more erratic and you feel your cock twitch slightly against your robes.") @@ -1277,18 +1279,18 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T3_E1_repeat: $ renpy.sound.play("sounds/slick_02.ogg") play bg_sounds "sounds/slickloopfast.ogg" - call nar(">You push another finger inside her and begin moving them around.") + call nar(">You push another finger inside her, and begin moving them around.") lun "*Ah*...{w=0.4} [lun_genie_name]..." ("soft", "narrow", "base", "up", cheeks="blush") gen "*Hmm*... Some lousy friends they are... I still can't find it..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "*Ah*...{w=0.3} *Ah*...{w=0.3} Are you...{w=0.3} Are you sure..." ("base", "narrow", "base", "up", cheeks="blush") - call nar(">You keep moving your fingers inside Luna, and as you do you feel her clench around them slightly.") + call nar(">You keep moving your fingers inside Luna, and as you do, you feel her clench around them slightly.") gen "Yes...{w=0.3} Although maybe it's just hiding..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") lun "*Ah*...{w=0.3} It...{w=0.3} What is--" ("soft", "narrow", "base", "up", cheeks="blush") gen "Better call in an expert..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") - call nar(">Keeping your fingers moving inside Luna you move your thumb and press it up against her clit.") + call nar(">Keeping your fingers moving inside Luna, you move your thumb and press it up against her clit.") lun "*Oooooh*!!!" ("grin", "wide", "base", "up", cheeks="blush") gen "There it is!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")