From 759720093b7ac1ed93a705f44c6a4d2cb50e146a Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: LoafyLemon Date: Thu, 4 Aug 2022 22:09:28 +0100 Subject: [PATCH] Vibrator Events - Proofreading --- .../hermione/events/items/vibrators.rpy | 215 +++++++++--------- 1 file changed, 108 insertions(+), 107 deletions(-) diff --git a/game/scripts/characters/hermione/events/items/vibrators.rpy b/game/scripts/characters/hermione/events/items/vibrators.rpy index d619fd52..670d7ad9 100644 --- a/game/scripts/characters/hermione/events/items/vibrators.rpy +++ b/game/scripts/characters/hermione/events/items/vibrators.rpy @@ -15,12 +15,12 @@ label hg_vibrators: gen "I've got a gift for you, [hermione_name]." ("base") her "A gift?" - gen "Yep, close your eyes and put your hand in this box!" ("base") - nar ">You present the box of fun to Hermione." - her "Satisfactory guarranteed? What does that mean?" - gen "Means what it says on the box, now close your eyes and put your hand in there." ("base") + gen "Yep, just close your eyes and put your hand in this box!" ("base") + nar ">You present the Box-o-fun to Hermione." + her "\"Satisfaction guaranteed\"? What does that mean?" + gen "It means what it says on the box, now close your eyes and put your hand in there." ("base") her "Alright..." - nar ">Hermione puts a hand in the box and brings out a set of eggshaped vibrators." + nar ">Hermione puts a hand in the box and takes out a set of egg-shaped vibrators." gen "Interesting... You've chosen well." ("base") her "Can I open my eyes now?" gen "Oh, yes go right ahead." ("base") @@ -32,7 +32,7 @@ label hg_vibrators: # First time (seen) $ her_vibrators_seen = True - nar ">Hermione opens her eyes, and looks over the vibrators hesitantly." + nar ">Hermione opens her eyes, and looks over the objects with suspicion." if her_tier < 4: jump hg_vibrators_fail @@ -40,7 +40,7 @@ label hg_vibrators: elif her_tier < 5: her "Is that... A vibrator?" gen "Vibrator{b}s{/b}!" ("grin") - gen "All of these eggs vibrate!" ("grin") + gen "All three of these vibrate!" ("grin") her "Surely you aren't expecting of me to put those things to use, are you?" nar ">You hold up the remote, circling your finger suggestively over the power switch." gen "What if I am?" ("grin") @@ -73,16 +73,16 @@ label hg_vibrators: if her_tier < 5: her "The vibrators again..." gen "How lucky for you." ("base") - gen "Ready to give them another whirl?" ("base") - her "*Hmm*...{w=0.4} Alright then, but I'll only do it for twenty points!" + gen "Ready to give them a another whirl?" ("base") + her "*Hmm*...{w=0.4} Sure, but only if you pay me twenty points!" gen "Yeah, yeah, now get on with it." ("base") her "..." else: her "I see..." #blush gen "That's a lucky pull!" ("grin") gen "Looks like it might be a shiny, even!" ("grin") - gen "Oh wait, that's just some remaining residue from last time." ("grin") - gen "Although perhaps you could give them another whirl to see if the rarity increases!" ("grin") + gen "Oh wait, that's just some remaining residue from the last time." ("grin") + gen "Although, you could give them another try to see if the experience increases its rarity!" ("grin") her "If you say so..." # Introduction (worn) @@ -100,10 +100,10 @@ label hg_vibrators: if hermione.is_any_worn("bra", "panties"): her "You want me to tape them to my breasts?!" - gen "Or you can put them inside your underwear, whatever boats your float..." ("base") + gen "Or you can put them inside your underwear, whatever floats your boat..." ("base") else: her "But then you'll see when I--" - her "Could I at least wear some underwear on top?" + her "Could I at least wear some underwear?" gen "If you must..." ("base") her "Thank you [genie_name]..." else: @@ -213,7 +213,7 @@ label hg_vibrators: with d5 her "..." #Looks down towards breasts annoyed her "..." #Looks up and sees you - her "[genie_name]! I told you not to look!" + her "[genie_name]! I asked you not to look!" $ her_mood += 5 @@ -377,45 +377,45 @@ label hg_vibrators_public: her "My school uniform?" if her_tier_public >= 5: - her "Don't tell me you're expecting me to wear them in class?" - gen "Alright, I'm not expecting you to only wear them in class." ("base") - her "Oh... Thank--{w=0.2} Wait, did you say {i}only{/i}?" - gen "I expect you to wear them outside of class as well, for the entire day." ("base") + her "Don't tell me you're expecting of me to wear them in class?" + gen "No, [hermione_name]..." ("base") + her "Oh... Thank--" + gen "I expect you to wear them outside class as well, for the entire day." ("base") her "The entire day?!" #shocked but horny gen "That's right." ("grin") - her "But [genie_name], wearing them for the entire day would--" - gen "Oh, that's right! I didn't think about chafing!" ("base") - her "I wasn't--{w=0.2} I mean, yes! There's no way I could wear them under my clothes for the entire day!" - gen "It's settled then. You'll wear them without any clothes on top." ("base") - her "Wait, that's not--{w=0.2} I'll have to wear clothes!" + her "But [genie_name], wearing them for the entire day is--" + gen "Blimey! I didn't think about chafing!" ("base") + her "I wasn't--{w=0.2} I mean, yes, there's no way I could wear them under my clothes for the entire day!" + gen "It's settled then. You'll wear them {i}without{/i} clothes." ("base") + her "Wait, that's not--{w=0.2} I have to wear clothes!" gen "Didn't you just say, there was no way you could--" ("base") - her "I'll be fine!" - gen "If you say so... Just don't come back, expecting me to kiss your sore nipples better." ("base") + her "On second thought, I'll be fine!" + gen "If you say so... Just don't come back expecting me to kiss your sore nipples better." ("base") her "I won't!" - gen "Yeah, don't even think about it...{w=0.4} I would really, really hate if you did that..." ("base") + gen "Yeah, don't even think about it...{w=0.4} I would really, really hate that if you did..." ("base") her "I..." - gen "Like really hate." ("base") + gen "Like, really hate." ("base") her "*Ehm*..." - gen "Like a lot." ("base") + gen "I'd be fuming." ("base") her "..." gen "Oh, one more thing." ("base") gen "You're not allowed to touch the controllers." ("base") - her "Wait, so you don't even want me to turn them on?" - gen "No, I'll do it myself from here, using this remote. That way you can just focus on enjoying yourself." ("base") + her "Hold on, how else can I control them?" + gen "You don't. I'll control them myself using the remote, that way you can just focus on enjoying yourself." ("base") her "You'll... But then how am I supposed to know when they'll go off?" - gen "You wont, that's what makes it fun." ("base") + gen "That's what makes it fun." ("base") her "What if they go off when there's other students or teachers around?" gen "That's just a risk you'll have to take." ("base") her "..." gen "Come on... It's just some tiny little vibrations. I'm sure you can handle it." - her "Fine, I'll do it...{w=0.2} But only because you're requiring it of me." + her "Fine, I'll do it...{w=0.2} But only because you asked..." elif her_tier_public == 4: her "You want me to wear them in class?!" gen "No, [hermione_name]..." ("base") her "Oh good, for a moment I thought--" gen "I want you to wear them during break time as well!" ("base") - gen "Of course, I want you to turn them on during class." + gen "Of course, they should be turned on at all times." her "But that's-- {w=0.2}Couldn't I just... {w=0.4}I don't know..." gen "Quit complaining, [hermione_name], you're about to earn {number=current_payout} for your house." ("base") gen "Surely that's more than enough of an incentive to broaden your sexual education." ("base") @@ -429,14 +429,17 @@ label hg_vibrators_public: her "{size=-4}Why am I even trying...{/size} *sigh*" gen "It's just some harmless vibrators, what's the harm?" ("base") her "But what if someone takes notice?" - gen "How exactly? It's not going to vibrate enough for the earth to quake or anything." ("base") - gen "Unless that's what you've named your--" ("grin") - her "I'm talking about the sound!" - gen "I'm sure it will be fine, just pick a class that is noisy, so no one hears the buzzing." ("base") + gen "Then maybe you should consider keeping your legs closed for the time being." ("grin") + gen "Unless you don't mind flashing yourself that is." ("grin") + her "I'm talking about the sounds!" + gen "That's simple. Just pick a class that is noisy enough, so no one is able to hear the buzzing." ("base") her "{size=-4}The buzzing is the least of my worries...{size=-4}" gen "What was that?" - her "Nothing, I was just thinking which class would work... Definitely not {i}History of Magic{/i}." - gen "When in doubt, do it in Tonks' class, I'm sure she'll appreaciate... I mean, I'm sure it's loud enough." + her "Nothing, I was just thinking what class would work... Definitely not {i}History of Magic{/i}." + gen "When in doubt, you could choose Tonks' class, I'm sure she would appreciate--" ("grin") + her "..." # slight shock + gen "I mean, I'm sure it's loud enough-- I mean, the class is--" ("angry") + gen "Fuck, I give up. You know what I mean anyway..." ("base") her "*Sigh*... I'll figure it out. As long as I'm getting paid of course." gen "Sure! Wouldn't have it any other way." ("grin") gen "See you later then." ("base") @@ -480,12 +483,12 @@ label hg_vibrators_public: her "You want me to use them in class again?" gen "Oh no... This time I want you to wear them the entire day." ("base") her "The entire day?!" - gen "Yep, and you're not allowed to touch the controllers..." ("base") + gen "Yep, and you're not allowed to touch the controls..." ("base") her "But, [genie_name]!" her "Wearing them through one class is one thing... But wearing them for the entire day is just..." gen "They won't remain turned on the entire day... I'm not that cruel." ("base") - her "But, I thought when you said I can't touch the controlls--" - gen "What I'm saying is... I'll be using this remote controller from here." ("base") + her "I thought when you said I can't touch the controls, you--" + gen "What I'm saying is... I'll be controlling it remotely, from here." ("base") gen "Like this." ("base") #click sound effect @@ -504,7 +507,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_public: her "..." gen "Why the hesitance [hermione_name], you have already wore them once, so you know what to expect." ("grin") her "The problem isn't {i}the what{/i}, but {i}when{/i}..." - her "Who know's what might happen if they go off at the wrong time." + her "Who knows what might happen if they go off at the wrong time." her "What if they go off while I'm presenting something in front of the entire class?" gen "You're talking as if anyone would pay any attention to the curriculum." ("base") her "..." @@ -531,12 +534,12 @@ label hg_vibrators_public: gen "That's what I said." her "No you didn't--" her "You know what, forget it." - gen "Done." ("base") + gen "Said and done!" ("base") her "..." gen "If my condition isn't satisfactory, I could just turn the vibrators on during lunch break..." ("base") - her "But, that's when every student and--" + her "But, that's when all students gather around--" her "I see what you're doing..." - her "Alright fine, {i}Gobstones{/i} it is." + her "Alright, fine, {i}Gobstones{/i} it is." gen "I knew you were the reasonable one." ("base") her "Unless..." #enticing gen "Yes?" ("base") @@ -662,8 +665,11 @@ label hg_vibrators_personal: gen "Of course... You are graded for every school activity, [hermione_name]." ("base") her "I-- *ah* -- Already know that." gen "Then spread those legs already, lest you want the {b}D{/b}... {w=0.2}grading." ("base") - her "Don't you mean {i}Troll{/i}?" - gen "You heard what I said..." + her "Don't you mean {i}Trolls{/i}?" + gen "Trolls? What the--" ("angry") + her "It is the grading system used in Hogwarts, I'm sure you--" + gen "Close your mouth, and open those legs..." + gen "(First she talks about trolls, then some hogwash... And they call {i}me{/i} the eccentric one, bah!)" ("base") # TODO Hermione legs open @@ -737,7 +743,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_personal: gen "As your headmaster, I have the power over your grades, and shall you fail to meet my expectations... Well--" ("base") gen "--Naturally you'll have to be punished!" ("base") her "P--{w=0.2} Punished?!" - gen "Punished!" + gen "Yes, punished!" her "!!!" gen "(I knew she'd like that one...)" ("base") gen "Prepare yourself, [hermione_name]!" ("base") @@ -905,11 +911,11 @@ label hg_vibrators_personal: her "What?!" her "(He turned it off! How could he!)" her "Why did you--" - gen "I used my power over you to do--" ("base") + gen "I used my power over you, to do the--" ("base") gen "--the unexpected..." gen "(Why do I always do this when people challenge me... Am I power tripping?)" ("base") her "But, I was... I was about to--" - gen "You wanted to make sure to satisfy me, not yourself, no?" ("base") + gen "You said you wanted to satisfy me, and that's exactly what I need to feel satisfied." ("base") her "Yes but I thought... Well, I didn't think this would happen..." gen "Always expect the unexpected in life, [hermione_name]." ("base") her "But--" @@ -948,7 +954,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_personal: gen "You pass!" ("base") her "I... do?" gen "Yes, [hermione_name]." ("base") - gen "Just like I requested, you held it in until the very end." ("base") + gen "Just like I requested, you held well until the very end." ("base") gen "Of course, you better be ready, because at any moment, I could give you the signal to..." ("base") gen "Cum for me!" ("base") with vpunch her "..." #worried #shocked @@ -991,7 +997,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_personal: gen "What are you doing?" ("base") her "*Ehm*...{w=0.2} Didn't you gift me these?" - gen "I thought I told you not to cum unless I say so, what are you planning to do with these exactly?" ("base") + gen "I just have told you not to cum unless I say so, what are you planning to do with these exactly?" ("base") her "W--{w=0.2} Well, I was hoping..." gen "Fine, I'll allow it this time.... Go ahead then." ("base") her "Thank you..." @@ -1030,7 +1036,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_personal: gen "I expect great things from you, [hermione_name]..." ("base") gen "Next time I shall grade you for your performance." ("base") her "(So he did remember...)" - her "Fine, I'll try to find an oportunity to practice in my... Dorm." + her "Fine, I'll try to find an opportunity to practice in my... chambers." # Hermione makes an unintentioanl pun, Genie's influence is rubbing off on her. gen "Splendid!" ("grin") gen "That will be all, [hermione_name]. You are dismissed." ("base") her "Thank you, [genie_name]..." @@ -1181,7 +1187,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_personal: gen "Or are you merely looking for my approval?" ("base") her "..." # looks away blushing if _temp_premature_finish: - gen "You'll have it once you're able to keep that supersoaker in check." + gen "You'll have it once you're able to keep that {i}super soaker{/i} of yours, in check." else: gen "If that's the case, you did a very good job achieving what I required of you. I'm proud of you, truly." ("base") her "..." #embarrased but happy @@ -1191,7 +1197,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_personal: if True: # TODO if vibrators not unlocked gen "Maybe after you've had some practice you can earn a passing grade." ("base") her "Practice?" - gen "So you'll be able to keep it going for longer if you had to..." ("base") + gen "If you could hold it in for longer..." ("base") her "Right... Practice it is..." "-She's had enough excitement for one day-": @@ -1209,7 +1215,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_personal: gen "Or you might end up blind." ("grin") her "........*sigh*" her "I won't..." - gen "Who said that?" + gen "Who said that?" ("base") else: # TODO else: gen "Don't forget your vibrators." ("base") @@ -1299,10 +1305,11 @@ label hg_vibrators_personal: her "*Hmph*." #annoyed gen "There's no need to be upset, [hermione_name]." ("base") her "There is, if you keep turning it up like that without telling me!" - gen "It did take your mind off your classmates though, didn't it?" ("base") + gen "I just wanted to steer your thoughts away from your classmates, and it worked!" ("base") her "..." - gen "Until I brought them up again right now." ("base") + gen "Until I brought them up again just now, I guess..." ("base") gen "Anyway..." ("base") + "-Turn it off-": # TODO click sound @@ -1326,14 +1333,14 @@ label hg_vibrators_personal: gen "Well?" ("base") her "Well--{w=0.2} *Ah*...{w=0.4} Well, what?" gen "You said you didn't want to think about your classmates, why is that?" ("base") - her "Oh...{w=0.4} Well..." + her "Oh...{w=0.4} Right..." gen "Don't tell me you've been skipping class!" her "What?! No, of course not!" her "I've been attending--{w=0.2} *Ah*...{w=0.4} Class...{w=0.2} As per usual." gen "That's good." ("base") her "Although--{w=0.2} *Ah*...{w=0.4} As you already know, I've arrived late to a couple of them." gen "You have?" ("base") - gen "Why are you arriving late to your classes?" ("base") + gen "Why are you being late to your classes?" ("base") her "*Ah*...{w=0.4} That's--{w=0.2} *Ah*...{w=0.4} That's kind of your fault... [genie_name]... I mean we spend so much time in here and all--" menu: @@ -1344,7 +1351,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_personal: gen "No need to worry, [hermione_name]. You're helping out the Headmaster after all." ("base") her "Oh, I wasn't worried about--" gen "I'm sure that such a bright girl as yourself is able to keep up with the curriculum anyway." ("base") - her "*Ah*...{w=0.4} Yes, so far--" + her "*Ah*...{w=0.4} Yes, thus far--" her "So...--{w=0.4} *Mmmm*...{w=0.4} So good..." gen "I appreciate your honesty, any other student would've kept this information from me." ("base") her "Oh, well..." #blush @@ -1361,7 +1368,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_personal: if True: # TODO If you turned up the vibrator previously: #Event end, low mood penalty - her "I told you not to--{w=0.2} *Ngh*...{w=0.4} Turn it up without telling me!" #Embarrased + her "I have told you not to--{w=0.2} *Ngh*...{w=0.4} Turn it up without telling me!" #Embarrased gen "*Hmm*?" ("base") gen "Does it not feel good?" ("base") her "T-That's not--{w=0.2} *Ahh*...{w=0.4} the problem!" @@ -1423,7 +1430,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_personal: gen "But we were just getting started!" ("base") her "And now we're finished." gen "Are you sure? I've finished plenty of times and it's usually more--" ("base") - her "Finished!" + her "--Finished! We're done here!" # TODO vibrators dissapear off the floor # TODO Hermione walks to genie @@ -1478,7 +1485,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_personal: # TODO sound off # TODO vibrators appear on floor - her "I told you to not turn it up without letting me know beforehand!" + her "I have told you to not turn it up without letting me know beforehand!" gen "What?!" ("angry") her "I can't believe you tried to make me apologise!" gen "..." ("angry") @@ -1510,13 +1517,9 @@ label hg_vibrators_personal: gen "You're not getting off from being scolded, are you?" ("base") her "Getting off from--{w=0.2} Of course not!" gen "Then why are you so wet, [hermione_name]?" ("base") - her "I'm--{w=0.2} *Ah*...{w=0.4} I am not wet!" - gen "Are you sure?" ("base") - her "Yes-- I..." - gen "Then we have a big problem." - her "*Ah*... We--" - gen "You're getting off... From lying!" - her "I'm not--{w=0.2} *Ahh*...{w=0.4} \"getting off\" from--{w=0.2} *Nghh*...{w=0.2} lying!" + her "I'm... *ah* not!" + gen "Clearly you are." ("base") + her "I don't... *Ahh* \"get off\" from being... *Nhh* scolded!" # TODO Replace vibrators in underwear with underwear @@ -1529,8 +1532,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_personal: her "Could--{w=0.2} Can I have my points now?" #looking down gen "But we haven't--" ("base") her "I insist..." - gen "(She... How do you get past a \"insist\"? I guess I have to comply...)" ("base") - gen "Alright then..." + gen "As you wish..." $ gryffindor += current_payout gen "{number=current_payout} points to Gryffindor!" ("base") @@ -1579,7 +1581,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_public_return: play bg_sounds "sounds/vibrator_low.ogg" - gen "Finally! What took you so--" ("base") + gen "Finally! What took you--" ("base") # TODO Hermione takes off top in desperation @@ -1681,7 +1683,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_public_return: gen "Of the book." gen "The thing you always read." her "..." - her "Either way..." + her "Anyway..." "-Push her horny buttons-": #TODO Genie stands up next to desk @@ -1710,22 +1712,22 @@ label hg_vibrators_public_return: # TODO Hermione equip basic bra her "Do you mean exposition?" - gen "Maybe? What's the difference?" ("base") - her "Either way, the context is..." - her "Professor McGonagall spotted my natural talents the very first day and has called me up to demonstrate them ever since." - her "She could imediately tell that I'm a master with a wand." + gen "There's a difference?" ("base") + her "Yes, but anyway, the context is..." + her "Professor McGonagall spotted my natural talents on the very first day, and has called me up to demonstrate them ever since." + her "She noticed right away that I am an expert at practising with magic wands." her "Of course, I'd expect no less from such a seasoned witch as her." gen "Ah yes... A very seasoned witch, teaching the arts of bukkake..." ("base") her "In fact, I was the first person to perfectly master turning a rat yellow and ever since then I've been the go to student to demonstrate--" gen "Hold on... A Rat?!" ("base") - her "Yes?" - gen "I don't want to hear about stupid rats, what about the exhibitioning? The vibrators? The guys jacking off, all of you and your teacher?" ("angry") + her "Yes, why so surprised?" + gen "I don't want to hear about stupid rats, what about the exhibitionism? The vibrators? The guys jacking off to you, and maybe your teacher as well?" ("angry") her "Jacking-- What on earth are you talking about?!" gen "Isn't this when you're supposed to tell me about the vibrators going off in front of your class?" ("angry") - her "No, you never turned them on during the morning class!" + her "No, you have never turned them on during the morning class!" gen "Then what is all this?!" ("angry") her "Exposition!" - gen "(Bloody exposition, and my daily naps!)" ("base") + gen "(Bloody exposition, and my daily naps!)" ("angry") her "I'll just skip forward to after the class..." her "So, after the class, I slipped away from my friends and waited, time ticking down for my next period." gen "Your--{w=0.2}, Wait, it's that time of the month?" ("base") @@ -1737,7 +1739,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_public_return: her "..." gen "So, the vibrators turned on during your break?" ("base") her "No, they didn't turn on before our next class either." - gen "Good, that would've been pretty anticlimactic." + gen "I'm relieved, that would've been pretty anticlimactic..." # Charms her "So, I begrudgingly made my way to charms--" @@ -1845,7 +1847,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_public_return: #CG Hermione outside in courtyard, in front of Harry and Ron who's playing Gobstones, base facial expression her "After some convincing, my friends and I finally made our way outside into the courtyard..." - her "And suddenly, just as we were about to sit down, the vibrators turned on." + her "Just as we were about to sit down, suddenly, the vibrators turned on." # This section has a different endings depending on the player choices. #Optimal order is Medium > Low > High @@ -1920,15 +1922,15 @@ label hg_vibrators_public_return: gen "Go on, this is not the time for dishonesty..." ("base") her "Well, the fact that I had gotten away with it felt a bit exciting, I guess." her "Still... I was having my privates stimulated in front of my friends, so I couldn't help but feel bit anxious." - gen "Guilty that they were being left out of all the fun no doubt." ("base") + gen "Guilty that they were missing all the fun no doubt." ("base") her "That's not what I meant!" her "I was feeling anxious because they might find out what I've been putting myself through for the sake of our house!" - gen "I see... Being left out of all the fun {size=+5}and{/size} earning points while doing it." ("base") + gen "I see... So not only they were missing all the fun, but also all the points they could earn while doing some favours." ("base") her "..." - her "[genie_name], you might be seeing all this as just some light hearted fun but I can assure you that they would not." - gen "This view is based on your ideal version of your friends or the one based in reality?" - her "The real version!" - gen "If you say so, [hermione_name]." + her "[genie_name], you might be seeing all this as just some light-hearted fun, but I can assure you that they would not see it in the same light." + gen "Your view is based on your idealised version of your friends, or the reality?" + her "The reality!" + gen "Sure, if you say so, [hermione_name]." her "..." her "Either way, I didn't have much time to think about my rising anxiousness..." gen "Right, so that's when I--" ("base") @@ -1954,7 +1956,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_public_return: # endif her "It sort of brought my last experience back to life again, and I started doubting if it was a wise decision to put myself through this again." - gen "Surely you weren't considering missing out on possibly one of the best orgasms of your life." ("base") + gen "Surely you weren't considering missing out on, possibly, one of the best orgasms of your life." ("base") her "I would never be concerned about missing out on such a thing!" gen "Right, of course. There no way that would happen on my watch." ("base") her "..." @@ -1992,7 +1994,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_public_return: gen "(She's going to say \"forfeiting the points\" isn't she...)" ("base") her "I didn't want to forfeit the points!" gen "(Nailed it.)" ("base") - her "I thought that if I had ran off, you wouldn't pay me and it would all have been for nothing..." + her "I thought that if I had ran off, you wouldn't pay me and it would all be for naught..." her "Although, I didn't have much time to consider my options as the decision was being made for me..." gen "Made for--" ("base") gen "Oh, I see." ("grin") @@ -2023,17 +2025,15 @@ label hg_vibrators_public_return: her "Getting caught off guard like that... Made it difficult to compose myself." gen "Pray tell..." ("base") - her "I was getting a bit exited, okay?" + her "I was getting a bit excited, okay?" gen "*Heh-heh*..." ("grin") gen "So, what were the boys doing? Surely they must've noticed their friend going delirious?" ("base") - her "It was difficult to tell, they were too busy playing with their balls..." + her "At that point, it was difficult to tell, they were too busy playing with their balls..." #Could cut back to room screen gen "{size=+4}THEY WERE WHAT?!?{/size}" ("angry") gen "{size=+4}In the middle of the courtyard?! At {b}my{b} school?!{/size}" ("angry") her "Where else should they do it?" - gen "The bathroom?! Their dorm?" ("angry") - gen "Doing that in the middle of the courtyard!" ("angry") - gen "Well, that requires the headmasters blessing!" ("angry") + gen "The bathroom?! Their dorm? Anywhere but the courtyard!" ("angry") her "But [genie_name], students have been doing it in the courtyard for generations!" gen "Watching them gobbling stones is one thing, but since when was \"ballplay\" in the courtyard acceptable?" ("angry") her "Ballpl--{w=0.4} [genie_name]... I'm talking about the gobstone balls!" @@ -2060,7 +2060,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_public_return: gen "I hardly know what you're talking about." ("grin") her "You're unbelievable... His dick! His dick was hard!" her "Happy?!" - gen "Just wanted to make sure you weren't talking about that gobbledigook game again." ("base") + gen "I just wanted to make sure you weren't talking about that {i}gobbledigook{/i} game again." ("base") her "Gobstones..." gen "You're certain he had a hard-on?" ("base") her "Of course I'm certain! I know what a boner looks like when I see one!" @@ -2081,7 +2081,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_public_return: her "In fact, I was beginning to feel my panties getting drenched--" gen "Naturally, you had just seen your friend pop-up a boner in front of you." ("grin") her "I wasn't getting off from my friends having a boner!" - gen "Having a boner... From looking at you...--" ("base") + gen "Getting hard... By looking at you...--" ("base") her "Moving on!" gen "Alright, alright..." ("base") gen "Please continue." ("base") @@ -2119,7 +2119,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_public_return: her "And that's when I started panicking a little..." her "I had second thoughts about this whole deal, about letting my friends see me in this state." her "I was never supposed to let it go this far, I just wanted to earn points for my house and make them happy!" - her "And here I was, standing right in front of them while being stimulated in all the wrong places." + her "And here I was, standing right in front of them while being stimulated all over." her "Was I about to let myself orgasm right then and there?" gen "Yes, obviously!" ("base") her "Obviously not!" @@ -2275,7 +2275,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_public_return: hide screen blkfade with d3 - gen "That's some tale, and orgasm... Here I thought I took that crown." ("base") + gen "That's one hell of an orgasm... And here I thought I took that crown." ("base") gen "So, is this like a bad ending or what?" ("base") her "A bad ending?" gen "Didn't they realise what happened to you? Wait, surely you wouldn't be here telling me all this if that was the case." ("base") @@ -2305,7 +2305,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_public_return: her "This time, though, they really did look concerned, and no wonder... I couldn't help but display something was happening, across my face." her "Trying to pull myself together, I only managed to muster an apologetic smile and stammer how close of a call it was..." gen "To cum all over them you mean?" ("base") - her "No, I-- The game..." + her "No, I meant the game..." her "Although, you are not entirely incorrect..." her "They went back to playing their game just in time as I felt myself being brought right to the edge..." her "My legs were quaking, I was sweating all over, but it wasn't just sweat that was dripping down my legs..." @@ -2450,7 +2450,8 @@ label hg_vibrators_public_return: # TODO Vibrators unlock in wardrobe prompt (like Collar event) her "So... How do these things work, exactly? Do I need to charge them or...?" - gen "... They're magic'." ("base") + gen "... These are magical items, they use magic, not volts." ("base") + gen "(Unless magic volts are a thing?)" ("base") her "Oh right..." her "Good night then, [genie_name]..." gen "Farewell and enjoy yourself, [hermione_name]." ("base") @@ -2481,7 +2482,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_public_return: her "I knew this was going to be a mistake... Why would I ever agree to something like this..." #still staring into space gen "Did you get caught?" ("grin") her "I--{w=0.2} I don't know... Maybe you could tell me." - gen "Did you turn on the vibrators during classes, like I requested?" ("base") + gen "Did you turn on the vibrators during class, like I requested?" ("base") her "Yes..." gen "Well then, tell me what happened." ("base") her "So, after I exited your office..." @@ -2491,7 +2492,7 @@ label hg_vibrators_public_return: $ hermione.strip("top") with d3 - her "Finally my resolve was set on the last lesson for today, Muggle Studies, as that class would be the least likely to cause me any trouble." + her "I finally decided to set focus on the final lesson for today-- the Muggle Studies --as that class would be the least likely to cause me any trouble." $ renpy.sound.play("sounds/cloth_sound3.mp3") $ hermione.strip("bottom")