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game/scripts/characters/hermione/events/requests/flash_your_tits.rpy

@@ -289,7 +289,7 @@ label hg_pr_flash_T3_E2:
     gen "*Hmm*..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     gen "You've got one tit out at least. As a wise man once said--" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     gen "{i}A tit in the hand is worth two in the bush.{/i}" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-    her "Well... I don't know if he ever realised I was trying to do something for his benefit."
+    her "I suppose... although I don't know if he ever realised I was trying to do something for his benefit."
     her "......................" ("annoyed", "base", "worried", "R")
     her "I'm sorry, [genie_name]..." ("open", "base", "base", "mid")
     gen "That's alright..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")

game/scripts/minigames/mirror/events/blueballing_bad.rpy

@@ -23,12 +23,12 @@ label blueballing_bad:
     call music_block
 
     nar "Sitting at his desk, doing some paperwork peacefully, Genie suddenly heard some voices, talking loudly while getting closer and closer to the office door..."
-    "Hermione""{size=-6}What now?{/size}"
-    "Tonks""{size=-6}Miss Granger... Enough is enough."
-    "Tonks""{size=-6}Even if he was a bit perverted, surely that wouldn't-{nw}"
-    "Hermione""{size=-4}A little bit perverted?!{/size}"
+    her "{size=-6}What now?{/size}"
+    ton "{size=-6}Miss Granger... Enough is enough."
+    ton "{size=-6}Even if he was a bit perverted, surely that wouldn't--{w=1.0}{nw}"
+    her "{size=-4}A little bit perverted?!{/size}"
     gen "(What's this fuss about?)" ("open", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-    "Tonks""{size=-4}Miss Granger, wait!{/size}{nw}"
+    ton "{size=-4}Miss Granger, wait!{/size}{w=0.75}{nw}"
     $ renpy.sound.play("sounds/door_down.ogg")
     with hpunch
     call her_chibi("stand", "door", "base")
@@ -40,7 +40,7 @@ label blueballing_bad:
 
     stop music fadeout 0.5
 
-    her "{b}I AM NOT CRAZY!{/b}" ("scream", "closed", "angry", "mid", xpos="right", ypos="head")
+    her "{b}I AM NOT CRAZY!{/b}" ("scream", "closed", "angry", "mid", xpos="far_right", ypos="head")
     $ renpy.sound.play("sounds/MaleGasp.ogg")
     gen "What the-" ("open", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
 
@@ -53,7 +53,7 @@ label blueballing_bad:
     ton "Miss Granger, you--" ("open", "wide", "shocked", "L", hair="neutral", xpos="far_right", ypos="head")
     her "I {b}know{/b} what I saw. He has to be the one who stole my panties!" ("angry", "base", "annoyed", "mid")
     her "I knew that house elf was his!" ("mad", "base", "annoyed", "R")
-    gen "That what?{w=0.25}{nw}" ("open", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+    gen "The what?{w=0.5}{nw}" ("open", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     her "Who else would have the authority and be perverted enough to--" ("mad", "closed", "annoyed", "mid")
     gen "I'm right here you know. Also, you--" ("open", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     her "You commanded that thing to steal panties, {b}MY{/b} panties." ("angry", "base", "annoyed", "L")
@@ -67,7 +67,7 @@ label blueballing_bad:
     call her_walk(xpos="418", ypos="430", speed=1.5)
     her "He--{w=0.2} He's covered his tracks... Or he made that {size=-3}idiot{/size} teacher Snape take them!" ("angry", "base", "annoyed", "R_soft")
     call her_walk(xpos="600", ypos="410", speed=1.5)
-    ton "Miss Granger, please, you have to-{nw}" ("open", "base", "annoyed", "stare", hair="annoyed")
+    ton "Miss Granger, please, you have to--{w=0.5}{nw}" ("open", "base", "annoyed", "stare", hair="annoyed")
     her "You think this is something-{w=0.25} You think this is bad?{w=0.25} This, this chicanery?!" ("angry", "wide", "angry", "L_soft", flip=True)
     call her_walk(xpos="599", ypos="410", speed=1.5)
 
@@ -88,11 +88,11 @@ label blueballing_bad:
     her "\"Not the Headmaster!\"{w=0.25}, \"Our Headmaster is not like that!\"..." ("clench", "base", "angry", "up")
     her "{b}WHAT A {size=+2}SICK{/size} JOKE!{/b}" ("scream", "wide", "angry", "stare")
     her "I should have stopped him when I had the chance..." ("clench", "base", "annoyed", "R_soft")
-    her "{size=-3}You--{/size}{w=1.0} You have to stop him Tonks!{w=0.25} You--" ("mad", "wide", "worried", "R_soft")
+    her "{size=-3}You--{/size}{w=1.0} You have to stop him Professor Tonks!{w=0.25} You--" ("mad", "wide", "worried", "R_soft")
     with hpunch
     stop music fadeout 0.5
     ton "{b}{size=+3}MISS GRANGER, YOU LOST YOUR SKIRT ON YOUR WAY IN!{/size}{/b}" ("scream", "closed", "angry", "mid", hair="angry")
-    her "{nw}" ("open", "wide", "base", "down", xpos="mid", ypos="base")
+    her "" ("open", "wide", "base", "down", xpos="mid", ypos="base")
     pause
     her "..." ("open", "wide", "base", "shocked")
     ton "..." ("annoyed", "base", "annoyed", "stare", hair="annoyed")