Fixes

* Fixed some narrator calls.
* Minor writing improvements.

game/scripts/characters/hermione/events/items/collars.rpy

@@ -648,7 +648,7 @@ label whore_scene: #(locked behind public reputation and last sex event)
     # and so it does make sense from a narration standpoint.
     if not hermione.is_equipped_item(her_neckwear_whore_collar):
         play sound "sounds/collar_click.ogg"
-        nar ">You grab her by the collar, swiftly unlocking it and taking it off of her."
+        nar "You grab her by the collar, swiftly unlocking it and taking it off of her."
 
     hide screen blkfade
     with d3
@@ -658,7 +658,7 @@ label whore_scene: #(locked behind public reputation and last sex event)
         her "A present?" ("soft", "wink", "worried", "mid_soft", cheeks="blush", trans=d3)
         gen "Yes, it's a lovely piece of jewellery to commemorate your self-acceptance." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
 
-        nar ">You present Hermione the collar you have taken off her neck a moment ago."
+        nar "You present Hermione the collar you have taken off her neck a moment ago."
 
         her "The collar? You're giving it to me?" ("open", "happy", "base", "mid",cheeks="blush")
         her "And how is that supposed to be a piece of jewellery?" ("annoyed", "narrow", "base", "R", cheeks="blush")

game/scripts/characters/hermione/events/potions/breast_expand.rpy

@@ -556,7 +556,7 @@ label her_potion_breasts_give:
             her "No...{w=0.4} Are you sure you gave me the right potion--" ("angry", "narrow", "base", "down")
             her "**Eekh*!!!" ("clench", "wide", "base", "stare") #shocked
 
-            nar ">Hermione jumps as the potion begins to take effect, bouncing her bossom."
+            nar "Hermione jumps as the potion begins to take effect, bouncing her bossom."
 
             gen "You were saying?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
             her "This... It feels a bit strange..." ("angry", "base", "base", "mid", cheeks="blush")
@@ -564,7 +564,7 @@ label her_potion_breasts_give:
             her "Yes...{w=0.4} There's a slight tingling sensation..." ("angry", "narrow", "base", "down", cheeks="blush")
             gen "(Some side effect perhaps?)" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
 
-            nar ">Hermione's breasts expand as the potion spreads through her body."
+            nar "Hermione's breasts expand as the potion spreads through her body."
 
             $ hermione.equip(her_chest_breasts1)
             play sound "sounds/boing02.ogg"
@@ -617,13 +617,13 @@ label her_potion_breasts_give:
 
             her "*Ah*...." ("grin", "narrow", "base", "up", cheeks="blush") #pleasure
 
-            nar ">Hermione shivers as the potion begins to take effect."
+            nar "Hermione shivers as the potion begins to take effect."
 
             gen "There it is..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
             her "Is--{w=0.2} Is it normal for the potion to make them so sensitive?" ("grin", "narrow", "base", "stare", cheeks="blush")
             gen "Sounds like a side effect, but I'd call that better than advertised." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
             her "*Mmm*...{w=0.4} What...{w=0.4} What's that supposed to mean?" ("smile", "narrow", "base", "stare", cheeks="blush")
-            nar ">Hermione's breasts bounces slightly as the potion spreads through her body."
+            nar "Hermione's breasts bounces slightly as the potion spreads through her body."
 
             $ hermione.equip(her_chest_breasts1)
             play sound "sounds/boing02.ogg"

game/scripts/characters/luna/chitchats.rpy

@@ -38,7 +38,7 @@ label luna_chitchat:
 
             block:
                 lun "I had a strange dream last night..." ("soft", "base", "base", "mid")
-                lun "I was alone, sitting by a tree when suddenly a rabbit carrying a pocket-watch jumped by..." ("open", "base", "base", "mid")
+                lun "I was alone, sitting by a tree, when suddenly a rabbit carrying a pocket-watch jumped by..." ("open", "base", "base", "mid")
                 lun "Must've been the cheese I ate before going to bed..." ("open", "base", "base", "down")
 
             block:

game/scripts/characters/luna/events/favors/inspect_her_body.rpy

@@ -73,7 +73,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E1_intro:
     if luna.is_worn("top"):
         gen "Now then..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
         gen "Let's start with your breasts." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-        gen "Take that top off for me will you." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+        gen "Take that top off for me, will you." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
         lun "Of course, [name_genie_luna]." ("base", "base", "base", "mid")
 
         #Luna takes top off
@@ -108,7 +108,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E1_intro:
     lun "So...{w=0.4} Do you think this should work, [name_genie_luna]?" ("open", "base", "raised", "mid")
     gen "Oh...{w=0.4} It's working alright." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
 
-    nar "Focusing your attention on the girls breasts, you feel your cock harden more and more with each stroke..."
+    nar "Focusing your attention on the girl's breasts, you feel your cock harden more and more with each stroke..."
 
     lun "Great! So what do I have to do to get the Wrackspurts out of them?" ("smile", "base", "base", "mid")
     gen "*Mmm*...{w=0.4} The what, sorry?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
@@ -302,7 +302,7 @@ label ll_pf_inspect_T2_E1_intro:
     nar "Luna's cheeks burns with red as she keeps grinding on the edge of your desk."
 
     gen "(Poor girl is literally edging...)" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-    gen "Alright, you have convinced me [name_luna_genie]... I'll do it!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+    gen "Alright, you have convinced me, [name_luna_genie]... I'll do it!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
 
     nar "Luna stops her grinding, and begins jumping happily on the spot. Her tits bouncing up and down as she does so."
 

game/scripts/characters/luna/summon.rpy

@@ -311,7 +311,7 @@ label name_luna_genie:
         lun "Alright, I suppose I am a girl after all." ("grin", "narrow", "base", "mid")
     elif name_luna_genie == "Partner":
         lun "[name_luna_genie]?" ("soft", "base", "base", "mid")
-        gen "Yes, we're partners in venture are we not?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+        gen "Yes, we're partners in this venture, are we not?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
         lun "Oh right!" ("angry", "base", "base", "mid")
         lun "Of course, you can call me that!" ("grin", "base", "base", "mid")
     elif name_luna_genie == "Bimbo":