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game/scripts/characters/cho/events/favors/inspect_her_body_tier2_hermione.rpy

@@ -75,8 +75,8 @@ label cc_pf_strip_T2_E3_hermione_choices:
             her "*Humph*..." ("annoyed", "narrow", "angry", "R")
             cho "And? What else?" ("smile", "narrow", "base", "L")
             gen "And Cho's thighs are probably the most impressive ones I've seen in the last hund-- decade or more!" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-            her "Well in that case..." ("soft", "closed", "base", "mid")
+            her "Well, in that case..." ("soft", "closed", "base", "mid")
-            her "In that case I'll give you a great opportunity to stare at them indefinitely." ("angry", "base", "angry", "mid")
+            her "In that case, I'll give you a great opportunity to stare at them indefinitely." ("angry", "base", "angry", "mid")
             cho "What are you talking about, Granger?" ("soft", "narrow", "raised", "L")
 
             # Hermione walks towards the desk to pick up Cho's clothing.
@@ -164,7 +164,7 @@ label cc_pf_strip_T2_E3_hermione_choices:
             her "Don't use that tone with the headmaster..." ("soft", "closed", "base", "mid")
             cho "Nobody asked you!" ("mad", "narrow", "angry", "L")
             her "He's the wisest wizard at our school...{w} Surely his word should be final..." ("smile", "narrow", "base", "mid_soft")
-            gen "I'd use the word astute but I'll take wise..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+            gen "I'd use the word astute, but I'll take wise..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
             cho "Why are you siding with her all of a sudden?" ("annoyed", "narrow", "angry", "mid")
             gen "Good question." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
             gen "Miss Granger, why don't you show Miss Chang why your body is superior to hers..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
@@ -233,7 +233,7 @@ label cc_pf_strip_T2_E3_hermione_choices:
                 her "Have a good night, Professor." ("soft", "closed", "base", "mid")
 
             gen "(...)" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-            her "See you in class Chang!" ("grin", "narrow", "base", "R_soft")
+            her "See you in class, Chang!" ("grin", "narrow", "base", "R_soft")
             cho @ cheeks blush "*Tzzzz*!" ("angry", "closed", "angry", "mid")
             cho @ cheeks heavy_blush "Cow..." ("annoyed", "narrow", "angry", "R")
 
@@ -288,7 +288,7 @@ label cc_pf_strip_T2_E3_hermione_choices:
 
             call bld
             gen "Damn!" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-            gen "For somebody that does a lot of exercising, she smells really nice!" ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+            gen "For somebody who does a lot of exercising, she smells really nice!" ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
             gen "Maybe I should be a bit nicer to her next time..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
 
             $ states.cho.ev.panty_thief.acquired = False
@@ -307,7 +307,7 @@ label cc_pf_strip_T2_E3_hermione_choices:
             gen "You do! I'd really like to hear your opinion on Miss Chang's shamelessly exposed body!" ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
             cho "*Mhmm*" ("base", "closed", "base", "mid") # Self assured.
             her "Fine..." ("soft", "narrow", "angry", "R")
-            her "\"Poor,\" I'd say..." ("soft", "closed", "base", "mid")
+            her "\"Poor\", I'd say..." ("soft", "closed", "base", "mid")
             cho "How dare you!{w=0.6} You snobby skunk!" ("scream", "narrow", "angry", "L", trans=hpunch)
             her "" ("base", "base", "base", "R")
             gen "(Is that better or worse than \"troll?\")" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head") # Snape explained school ratings during the match.
@@ -330,7 +330,7 @@ label cc_pf_strip_T2_E3_hermione_choices:
             her "I do not!!!" ("open", "wide", "base", "stare")
             gen "Girls, we all know what really counts is how we appear on the inside." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
             her "" ("angry", "closed", "angry", "mid")
-            cho "Oh shut up!" ("angry", "narrow", "angry", "mid")
+            cho "Oh, shut up!" ("angry", "narrow", "angry", "mid")
             her "Professor, you're the one who continuously asks us to expose ourselves!" ("soft", "base", "angry", "mid")
             gen "Well yes. I also never claimed that {b}I{/b} was pretty on the inside." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
             gen "You of all people should know better by now..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
@@ -341,8 +341,8 @@ label cc_pf_strip_T2_E3_hermione_choices:
             cho "But I wouldn't say all hope is lost!" ("smile", "narrow", "angry", "L")
             cho "While your figure might be a bit repulsive to the eyes..." ("soft", "closed", "base", "mid")
             cho @ cheeks blush "I don't mind looking at those {b}huge melons{/b} of yours." ("soft", "narrow", "base", "L")
-            her "How dare you talk of them like that!" ("angry", "narrow", "angry", "R")
+            her "How dare you speak of them like that!" ("angry", "narrow", "angry", "R")
-            gen "*Heh*... melons..." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+            gen "*Heh*... Melons..." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
             her "Sir, I'd like to leave now." ("open", "base", "angry", "mid")
 
             cho "Already missing your books, are you?" ("annoyed", "narrow", "base", "L")

game/scripts/characters/cho/events/panties.rpy

@@ -10,7 +10,7 @@ label cho_panties_response_T2:
 
     play music "music/fuzzball-parade-by-kevin-macleod.ogg" fadein 1 if_changed
     cho "Hello, [name_genie_cho]." ("soft", "narrow", "worried", "mid", xpos="right", ypos="base")
-    gen "Sup..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+    gen "[name_cho_genie]..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     cho "*Uhm*..." ("annoyed", "narrow", "worried", "R")
     cho @ cheeks blush "I forgot to take my underwear with me the last time I was here." ("soft", "narrow", "worried", "downR")
 

game/scripts/characters/cho/events/quidditch/gryffindor_practice.rpy

@@ -49,7 +49,7 @@ label cc_gt_return:
     gen "Had a fruitful day, smacking some peaches?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     cho @ cheeks blush "I did not!" ("disgust", "narrow", "angry", "mid", xpos="mid", ypos="base", trans=d3)
     gen "Too bad, I was so sure it would have worked." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-    cho @ cheeks blush "Oh it worked alright..." ("annoyed", "closed", "angry", "mid")
+    cho @ cheeks blush "Oh, it worked alright..." ("annoyed", "closed", "angry", "mid")
     gen "It did?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     cho @ cheeks blush "In fact, it worked so well I'm not sure what was redder, Katie's bum, or Hermione's face..." ("angry", "narrow", "base", "R")
     cho @ cheeks blush "She was fuming!" ("base", "narrow", "angry", "mid")
@@ -172,7 +172,7 @@ label cc_gt_talk:
             gen "Not yet... I've got some things to take care of before then." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
             cho "That's too bad, I want to crush those Gryffindors already!" ("base", "base", "base", "mid")
             gen "(I've still got to help her find a broom in the morning...)" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-            gen "(And how am I supposed to get cheerleading squad together...)" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+            gen "(And how am I supposed to get a cheerleading squad together...)" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
             gen "(Perhaps there's some other Ravenclaw student I can ask...)" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
         elif not states.cho.ev.quidditch.e11_complete:
             # Didn't ask Luna to cheer
@@ -184,7 +184,7 @@ label cc_gt_talk:
         elif not states.cho.ev.quidditch.e12_complete:
             # Didn't get the broom
             gen "Not until we have you pick out one of the school brooms to use." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-            cho "You mean not until we find out how worthless they are and you have to get me a proper broom." ("base", "base", "base", "mid")
+            cho "You mean not until we find out how worthless they are, and you have to get me a proper broom." ("base", "base", "base", "mid")
             gen "..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
         else: #Match ready
             gen "As long as you're ready." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")

game/scripts/characters/cho/events/quidditch/hufflepuff_match.rpy

@@ -9,7 +9,7 @@ label start_hufflepuff_match:
     cho "To be honest, [name_genie_cho], I'm feeling quite nervous." ("soft", "base", "worried", "R")
     gen "Don't worry. I believe you are ready..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     gen "When are you going to play against Hufflepuff?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-    cho "That's up to you, [name_genie_cho]. As headmaster you decide when the games will be held..." ("open", "base", "base", "mid")
+    cho "That's up to you, [name_genie_cho]. As headmaster, you decide when the games will be held..." ("open", "base", "base", "mid")
     gen "So if I were to say tomorrow, it will happen tomorrow?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     cho "Yes, [name_genie_cho]." ("base", "base", "base", "mid")
     gen "Well then, tomorrow it is!" ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
@@ -78,7 +78,7 @@ label hufflepuff_match:
     sna "Granger..." ("snape_08")
     sna "Well, that's very displeasing to say the least..." ("snape_07")
     sna "In any case, you won't be seen up close by any of the other teachers." ("snape_09")
-    gen "Sounds like a snore. Can't I stay here and you'll tell them I'm ill or something?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+    gen "Sounds like a snore. Can't I stay here, and you'll tell them I'm ill or something?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     sna "No." ("snape_04")
     sna "That would just prompt the nurse to examine you closely..." ("snape_03")
     gen "Well... I wouldn't mind that." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
@@ -90,7 +90,7 @@ label hufflepuff_match:
     # Show wine
     call give_reward(text=">Not grape-juice.", gift="interface/icons/wine.webp")
 
-    gen "That's all the persuasion I needed my friend!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+    gen "That's all the persuasion I needed, my friend!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     hide screen bld1
     with d3
     pause .2
@@ -140,7 +140,7 @@ label hufflepuff_match:
 
     nar "You make your way towards the pitch with Snape, pondering if this was such a good idea."
     play sound "sounds/steps_grass.ogg"
-    nar "After walking for a while across the school grounds a huge oval shaped pitch with massive towers around it looms before you."
+    nar "After walking for a while across the school grounds, a huge oval-shaped pitch with massive towers around it looms before you."
     nar "Amazed by...{w=0.6}{nw}"
     gen "Agrabah towers are larger..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     nar "Amazed... by the sight, Snape then leads you to the base of one of the towers."
@@ -461,7 +461,7 @@ label hufflepuff_match:
             mal "Fight? Against what?"
             gen "{size=-4}See, that guy knows his lines...{/size}" ("base")
             sna "..." ("snape_03")
-            gen "Aye... fight and you may die." ("base")
+            gen "Aye... fight, and you may die." ("base")
 
             call sna_chibi("stand", 230, 400, flip=True)
             with d3
@@ -566,7 +566,7 @@ label hufflepuff_match:
     call quidditch_stands(crowd_react=["emo8", "emo7", "emo8"])
     with d3
 
-    nar "After a moment of confusion the crowd cheers excitedly, eager to see the match kick-off."
+    nar "After a moment of confusion, the crowd cheers excitedly, eager to see the match kick-off."
 
     call quidditch_stands(crowd_react=[None, None, None])
     with d3
@@ -668,7 +668,7 @@ label hufflepuff_match:
     call quidditch_stands(crowd_react=["th", "an", "excl"])
     with d3
 
-    mal2 "Yeh! Start the game!"
+    mal2 "Yeah! Start the game!"
     qcr "START THE GAME! START THE GAME!"
     nar "Hermione's voice eventually gets drowned out by the growing restlessness of the crowd."
     her "" ("normal", "base", "base", "mid", xpos=290, ypos="base", flip=True)
@@ -704,7 +704,7 @@ label hufflepuff_match:
     play sound "sounds/ball_hit.ogg"
     her "*Umm*, I'm not sure if anyone's scored yet..." ("normal", "happy", "base", "mid")
     her "Wait, that guy has the quaffle... I think..." ("open", "squint", "base", "mid")
-    her "Scratch that last bit, he has a stick so he must be a beater!" ("mad", "happy", "base", "mid")
+    her "Scratch that last bit, he has a stick, so he must be a beater!" ("mad", "happy", "base", "mid")
     sna "{size=-4}Good grief...{/size}" ("snape_05", ypos="head")
 
     pause .5
@@ -895,7 +895,7 @@ label hufflepuff_match:
     call quidditch_stands(crowd_react=[None, None, None])
     with d3
 
-    sna "Yes, and I was starting to enjoy it. You are missing most of it by the way..." ("snape_20", ypos="head")
+    sna "Yes, and I was starting to enjoy it. You are missing most of it, by the way..." ("snape_20", ypos="head")
     her "As a result of your yelling!" ("scream", "closed", "angry", "mid")
     her "" ("normal", "closed", "angry", "mid")
     sna "Eyes forward... girl." ("snape_13", ypos="head")
@@ -1011,7 +1011,7 @@ label hufflepuff_match:
 
     # Outro
     gen "This isn't such a bad game after all." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-    sna "I *hick* told you... so..." ("snape_22", ypos="head")
+    sna "I--{w=0.2} *hick*...{w=0.2} told you so..." ("snape_22", ypos="head")
     gen "Just bring more wine next time!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     sna "M-More?!" ("snape_20", ypos="head")
     gen "Or at least share more of it with me!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
@@ -1101,7 +1101,7 @@ label hufflepuff_match_return:
     play sound "sounds/MaleGasp.ogg"
     gen "{size=+10}IT WASN'T ME!{/size}" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     gen "..........." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-    cho "*huh*?{w=0.5} Are you okay, [name_genie_cho]?" ("soft", "narrow", "base", "mid")
+    cho "*Huh*?{w=0.5} Are you okay, [name_genie_cho]?" ("soft", "narrow", "base", "mid")
     gen "Wha--" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     gen "Of course I am!" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     cho "..." ("annoyed", "narrow", "raised", "R")

game/scripts/characters/cho/events/quidditch/hufflepuff_practice.rpy

@@ -18,7 +18,7 @@ label cc_ht_start:
 
     cho "Ready as I'll ever be." ("open", "narrow", "base", "R")
     gen "Great. Get your team ready cause you are going to play today." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-    cho "I'll give their team captain a heads up during classes then." ("soft", "narrow", "base", "mid")
+    cho "I'll give their team captain a heads-up during classes then." ("soft", "narrow", "base", "mid")
     gen "Good, let me know how it went once practice finishes." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     cho "I will, [name_genie_cho]. Wish me luck." ("soft", "base", "base", "mid")
 
@@ -130,7 +130,7 @@ label cc_ht_talk:
         cho "And little miss Granger wasn't even the slightest bit intimidated by her new obligation?" ("open", "base", "raised", "mid")
         gen "Not at all. She seemed rather joyous about her situation." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
         cho "Oh..." ("annoyed", "base", "worried", "down") # Bit sad.
-        cho "Well she just doesn't know what's coming towards her yet!" ("annoyed", "narrow", "angry", "mid")
+        cho "Well, she just doesn't know what's coming towards her yet!" ("annoyed", "narrow", "angry", "mid")
         cho "{size=-4}I hope she gets hit by a bludger as well! I might even tell the boys to aim at her once or twice!{/size}" ("angry", "narrow", "angry", "R") # Small text.
         gen "Make sure you tell everyone how your great and very proactive headmaster sorted everything out..." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
         cho "Oh, I will. Thank you very much!" ("soft", "base", "base", "mid")

game/scripts/characters/cho/events/quidditch/slytherin_practice.rpy

@@ -94,7 +94,7 @@ label cc_st_return:
 
                 cho "No, sir." ("soft", "base", "base", "mid")
                 gen "..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-                gen "(Damn it, that naivety of hers is turning me on!)" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+                gen "(Damn it... That naivety of hers is turning me on!)" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
 
             "\"Brats like you need to be punished!\"":
                 $ states.cho.mood += 2
@@ -172,13 +172,13 @@ label cc_st_return:
         gen "Welcome back..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
         cho "..." ("annoyed", "base", "angry", "R") #Annoyed
         gen "Don't tell me they didn't show up again... Tonks assured me she'd get them to--" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-        cho "No they did show up alright." ("open", "narrow", "angry", "mid")
+        cho "No, they did show up alright." ("open", "narrow", "angry", "mid")
         gen "Excellent!" ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
         gen "Then what about our strategy, do you think it will work during the game?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
         cho "I can't believe I flaunted my ass at them... but yes, I believe it will work." ("soft", "closed", "raised", "mid")
         cho "Crabbe and Goyle especially should be a great help, turning the game to my favour." ("smile", "narrow", "raised", "R")
         cho "So long as they don't give my ass too much of a {i}bludgering{/i}..." ("clench", "base", "raised", "mid")
-        gen "Just make sure to pick the right moment to distract them and you'll be fine." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+        gen "Just make sure to pick the right moment to distract them, and you'll be fine." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
         gen "Very well then, I guess we're ready to take those snakes on for the main match!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
         if not states.cho.ev.quidditch.e7_complete:
             cho "What about Granger?" ("annoyed", "base", "raised", "mid")

game/scripts/characters/cho/events/quidditch/training.rpy

@@ -75,7 +75,7 @@ label cho_training:
                     gen "You'll have to wear a skirt of course." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
                     cho @ cheeks heavy_blush "A skirt?" ("clench", "wide", "base", "mid") #shocked
                     gen "Of course!" ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-                    gen "If he's too focused on your panties there's no way he'll catch that snatch!" ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+                    gen "If he's too focused on your panties, then there's no way he'll catch that snatch!" ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
                 else:
                     # Repeated intro
                     gen "So about that tactic..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
@@ -163,7 +163,7 @@ label cho_training:
                     gen "It's all about the ass!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
                     cho @ cheeks blush "The ass?" ("upset", "base", "raised", "mid") #shocked
                     gen "Yes, you told me how those brutes love a good ass spanking, now that's an ass fetish if I ever heard one!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-                    gen "So this time we'll have those Slytherins get a good look of your ass!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+                    gen "So this time we'll have those Slytherins get a good view of your ass!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
                 else:
                     # Repeated intro
                     gen "So about that tactic..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
@@ -221,7 +221,7 @@ label cho_training:
                     cho "But, but, but!" ("open", "closed", "worried", "mid")
                     gen "That's probably what the crowd will be chanting..." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
                     cho "Teasing Cedric is one thing... but the Slytherins..." ("mad", "happyCl", "worried", "down")
-                    cho "I can't see my self doing...{w=0.4} this..." ("base", "base", "base", "mid")
+                    cho "I can't see myself doing...{w=0.4} this..." ("base", "base", "base", "mid")
                     gen "Well, that's your loss I guess..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
                     cho @ cheeks blush "..." ("normal", "happyCl", "base", "mid")
                     cho @ cheeks blush "If that's all you have then I think I'm done here." ("open", "base", "worried", "down")
@@ -293,7 +293,7 @@ label cho_training:
 
                     cho "What should I be wearing?" ("open", "base", "raised", "mid")
                     gen "What do you mean?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-                    cho "Well, up until now you've made me wear some silly combination of clothes." ("soft", "base", "base", "mid")
+                    cho "Well, previously, you've made me wear some silly combination of clothes." ("soft", "base", "base", "mid")
                     gen "You can wear whatever you like, fashion is too complicated for me." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
                     cho "I see..." ("base", "narrow", "base", "mid")
                     cho "In that case--" ("open", "base", "base", "R")
@@ -324,7 +324,7 @@ label cho_training:
                     cho @ cheeks blush "Teasing them is one thing but touching as well?" ("angry", "base", "base", "mid")
                     cho @ cheeks heavy_blush "With everyone watching." ("horny", "happyCl", "base", "mid") #blushes but imagining it
                     gen "..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-                    cho @ cheeks blush "No, I wont do it..." ("horny", "base", "base", "downR")
+                    cho @ cheeks blush "No, I won't do it..." ("horny", "base", "base", "downR")
                     gen "But what if--" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
 
                     # Cho gets upset and leaves
@@ -425,7 +425,7 @@ label cho_tactics:
 
     # Change Tactic
     #TODO This plays once cho has agreed to the tactic/clothing and during the first intro
-    # Once you pick the right option the practice match option unlocks (Maybe we should have it say Try out tactic?)
+    # Once you pick the right option, the practice match option unlocks (Maybe we should have it say Try out tactic?)
     # The various options should go away once you've tried it once
 
     label .change_front:
@@ -468,7 +468,7 @@ label cho_tactics:
 
             gen "We'll test the tactics during the next practice like usual." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
             cho @ cheeks blush "Do we have to? I'm sure it will work even without trying it." ("clench", "base", "raised", "mid")
-            gen "Of course we do! You're the one that was so adamant last time..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+            gen "Of course we do! You're the one who was so adamant last time..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
             gen "So let's see those results!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
             cho @ cheeks blush "Yeah... Great, just let me know when..." ("normal", "closed", "base", "mid")
             gen "I certainly shall." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")

game/scripts/characters/cho/events/requests/spy_on_the_girls.rpy

@@ -37,12 +37,12 @@ label cc_pr_spy_girls_start:
             cho @ cheeks blush "My cup-size?!" ("angry", "wide", "base", "mid")
             gen "That's right." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
             cho @ cheeks heavy_blush "But that's not even correct! Mine is--" ("disgust", "happyCl", "base", "mid")
-            cho @ cheeks blush "I mean...{w=0.4} Where do you get all these ideas from... Seriously!?" ("upset", "narrow", "angry", "R")
+            cho @ cheeks blush "I mean...{w=0.4} Where do you get all these ideas from, seriously!?" ("upset", "narrow", "angry", "R")
             gen "So what's your actual size then?{w} B?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
             cho @ cheeks blush "..." ("annoyed", "narrow", "worried", "down") #Blushes
-            cho @ cheeks heavy_blush "Yes it's B..." ("soft", "narrow", "angry", "downR") #Blushes and glances to the side
+            cho @ cheeks heavy_blush "Yes, it's B..." ("soft", "narrow", "angry", "downR") #Blushes and glances to the side
             gen "Noted..." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-            cho @ cheeks blush "You're such an old pervert, you know that right?" ("annoyed", "narrow", "angry", "mid")
+            cho @ cheeks blush "You're such an old pervert, you know that, right?" ("annoyed", "narrow", "angry", "mid")
 
         else:
             # Player has spied on the boys
@@ -139,13 +139,13 @@ label cc_pr_spy_girls_start:
         cho "..." ("soft", "base", "base", "mid")
         gen "You can't get caught when you spy on her Johnson--" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
         gen "I mean-- when you spy on Johnson..." ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-        cho "Of course... So what--" ("open", "base", "base", "mid")
+        cho "Of course... So, what--" ("open", "base", "base", "mid")
         gen "Utmost!" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
         cho "" ("upset", "base", "base", "mid")
         gen "Importance!" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
         cho "..." ("annoyed", "narrow", "base", "mid")
         gen "So are you ready, B?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
-        cho "Yes I'm ready..." ("soft", "narrow", "angry", "R")
+        cho "Yes, I'm ready..." ("soft", "narrow", "angry", "R")
         gen "Don't get spotted!" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
         cho "Until later then..." ("open", "closed", "base", "mid")
 
@@ -265,7 +265,7 @@ label cc_pr_spy_girls_T3_alicia:
 
     cho "I saw her whisper something into another student's ear..." ("soft", "closed", "base", "mid")
     cho "And as if on command -- they immediately followed her into the girls' toilets." ("soft", "narrow", "angry", "mid")
-    gen "A girl that takes what she wants... I respect that." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+    gen "A girl who takes what she wants... I respect that." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     cho "" ("annoyed", "narrow", "angry", "mid")
     gen "So, what was she doing with them?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     cho "Do you really have to ask, [name_genie_cho]?" ("open", "narrow", "raised", "mid")
@@ -326,7 +326,7 @@ label cc_pr_spy_girls_T3_katie:
     gen "Mission successful?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     gen "What did you learn about Katie Bell?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     cho "She's a freak!" ("soft", "narrow", "angry", "mid") # angry
-    gen "Whoa, that's a bit uncalled for, don't you think?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+    gen "Whoa, that's a bit uncalled-for, don't you think?" ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     gen "I'm sure she looks perfectly fine." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     cho "No, not her looks... what she's been doing." ("open", "closed", "angry", "mid") # blush
     cho "I followed her all the way down to the lake today. And then hid behind a tree to observe her." ("open", "narrow", "angry", "mid")
@@ -339,8 +339,8 @@ label cc_pr_spy_girls_T3_katie:
     gen "That's...{w=0.4} odd..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     gen "Perhaps she's a mermaid?" ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     cho "I highly doubt that, seeing that she has legs..." ("open", "closed", "base", "mid")
-    cho "Although, for a moment I did consider that the mermaids living there -- might have used their songs to charm her..." ("soft", "base", "raised", "up")
+    cho "Although, for a moment, I did consider that the mermaids living there -- might have used their songs to charm her..." ("soft", "base", "raised", "up")
-    gen "Well that's not concerning at all..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+    gen "Well, that's not concerning at all..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     cho "She did resurface a couple of moments later though... just as I began to worry..." ("annoyed", "base", "base", "mid")
     cho "But she emerged with a huge splash -- as she had been lifted into the air by some giant tentacles!" ("soft", "base", "angry", "mid")
     gen "Whoa, tentacles!" ("angry", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
@@ -418,7 +418,7 @@ label cc_pr_spy_girls_T3_angelina:
     gen "*Hmm*... Not a bad idea, now that I think about it..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     gen "We should try that as well." ("grin", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     cho "No! I don't want to win by cheating!" ("clench", "narrow", "angry", "mid")
-    gen "Yes, cause distracting hardly counts as cheating..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
+    gen "Yes, because distracting hardly counts as cheating..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     cho "Well of course it doesn't! It's within the rules!" ("open", "closed", "base", "mid")
     gen "..." ("base", xpos="far_left", ypos="head")
     cho "We need to do something about it, before Angelina tries to take advantage of the situation..." ("soft", "narrow", "angry", "mid")